I'm glad you liked the amount of detail. I keep trying to write a 2K story, but it seems beyond me. In this case, I really wanted to try to capture Harry's lifestyle and attitude, since it had changed so much. Then, I felt it important to show why and how it changed.
It's nice to know that the demon scene worked. It took a lot of rewriting to get it to a point that I could even let others see it. And if it had some tension and uncertainty, I've done my job!