What a wonderful romantic comedy. I really felt for Severus as he suffered through the less than inspiring company that was supposed to entertain him. I’m sure he got some satisfaction from those hilariously sour mental comments, though.
Your Harry was very likable, especially since he wasn’t perfect. I enjoyed seeing how his moods and behaviour changed from one visit to another - such a typical teenager. And his jumpy determination was adorable once the idea of helping Severus out had sunk in. The hospital sex was hot and funny.
The handholding and the whole Hogwarts part of the story were very romantic, not to mention the perfect ending. I admired your way of introducing the warmer feelings without losing the humour or the hotness of the earlier part. Here’s my favourite bit of banter:
Harry shrugged. "I kind of like you," he said, his face twisting in embarrassment. Then he smiled a bit wider. "Though fuck knows why."
"Oh, how charming," Severus said dryly. "Really, Potter, you sweep me away with the romance of your soul."
"Shut up, Snape," Harry said, taking a step closer. "Here – or in, in, your room?"
"You can’t even say the word ‘bed’, can you?" Severus said, hoping that mockery would get rid of this tempting, infernal being in front of him.
"Shut up," Harry said.
Severus found himself with a lap full of Potter – and a face full as well.
For a moment he sat there, entirely frozen. Harry was pressing little kisses to his mouth and – while his lower regions told him that they approved of this – his mind was screaming that this was the worst thing he could do, ever.
"No?" Harry said, drawing back. His face was red and embarrassed.
"Shut up," Severus said, his body reacting on its own, tugging Harry back into his arms.