Wow, this was intense! Poor Harry is really put through the wringer throughout this story, and you did a great job of conveying his psychological state in coping with it all. The relentless tension and suspense built to a fever pitch by the time Draco was talking to the goblin about the will, and your misdirection as to the villain was very effective.
Your characterizations of everyone were wonderful, from Snape's pre-emptive rejection of Harry to Ron's endless suspicions to Hermione's logical approaches. The idea of Draco in the WMPD was intriguing and apt as a Slytherin approach to making his way in the post-Voldy world. I enjoyed Pansy and Theo as well, and the way you wove them into the rescue. The happy ending felt believable, as it didn't minimize the trauma of Harry's imprisonment or the toll it had taken on him, but fortunately he has two wonderful men to help him heal. This was a gritty and engrossing tale.