I tried to use a lot of both your and winoniel's suggestions, as much as time permitted. The deadline seemed to just zoom up so quickly!
The basic story is still the same; I did try and add some more descriptive things to show Harry's character better in relation to the BDSM aspect we discussed. I really, really appreciate all your feedback and help with this. It was truly tough to write and seems to be just as tough to read for most people. Overall, it's the story that was inspired by that photo series, so I'm happy with how it turned out.
I miss you being around - I hope your work is going well.
(I posted a more detailed explanation on my LJ on why the warnings are there, so if you want to rec and also include a link to that post, it might be a good idea for those who are on the fence about reading because of the warnings.)