I'm shamefully late in commenting (been slaving away on my own submission) but Holy Sacred Blessed Fuck, Clue. This achieves the near-impossible feat of being even HOTTTer than the draft!
I'm still utterly smitten with the ecstatic arch of Snape's neck, the sensual absorption in both their faces, the way they're gasping into the kiss. Harry's facial tattoos rock so very hard, as does Snape's silver arm. The anatomy and modulation of line is lovely; both are hallmarks of your style.