Ron's funeral resonated--and I had to stop and wonder how much of this you were pulling out of the hat and how much from real life...It was so real. The chanting, the sounds that were powerful without words interfering. Lovely.
His voice sounded as sardonic as ever, but it cracked slightly when he said, "At last, my arm is complete again."
Hee, I should have seen that one coming.
Severus Snape did indeed have a cock, that it was currently rampant.
Rampant cock needs a visual. I'm thinking a coat-of-arms. (:
A small typo: "it wasn't as much of a challenge as changing a collar through the foce of love"
I'm noticing lots of the other comments point to this story as the angst's angst. And well, it's angsty all the way to the end, but the end is so hopeful, so full of promise and maybe's, that it doesn't seem like angst at all. In short, it took me three days to read, and, by third day, I was in love.