First off, I would like to say that I love this story quite well. However, I feel like soemthing is missing. Maybe I should not have been reading this one when I don't feel well. Everytime I read a certain part of the story, I thought that it would be going that way, but you wrote it diferently from what I thought. Should this story be "choose your path", I might already be dead early in the story. :p Thanks for an entertaining story.
Nothing against you really, but I feel a little let down towards the end, like it was a rushed off to finish the story quick. I hope you don't take this to heard.