Re: Great ideas here
Thanks for the review and concrit. My beta-readers already pointed out my tendency to write run-on sentences. Anyway, I appreciate the concrit because you pointed out how I can improve my writing. Though, I admit I might have been a bit crushed if this had been the first review.
But yeah, I'm a first-year English Major at a University in Finland, which means that English is not my native language, and that I'm used to getting corrected :) Anyhow, glad you commented on my story. :)