I am still surprised every time I get a comment on my style. I put so much work into curbing my loquacity and my bad tendency to pile on the adjectives that now people think I'm like Hemingway or something. I'm glad you liked it, though! I did write that stuff to get back at canon. I couldn't believe it in DH when Hermione washed Ron's underwear. PATHETIC. My story has a moral, and it's, "Straight men who want to be irresistible to women should learn to cook and wash their own damn underwear."