Very enjoyable story. I like your laconic style. It’s very refreshing, although it took me some time to get used to it.
This is a great ”how to best canon” moment:
"Are we going right now?" Ron asked. "If you don't need to use the loo first," Hermione said. Ron rolled his eyes. "I'm joking," Hermione said. "I didn't pack your things for you, either." "I packed my own things," Ron said. "And Harry's." He held up a knapsack. "You packed my things?" "I told you they would get this done today," Ron said. "I can pack my own things," Harry insisted. "You said by teatime."
Also, Ron cooked and was a good friend. Poor Harry, though, I almost felt guilty laughing at his cluelessness. :)
I’m fascinated by Snape’s (frustrated?) reaction here:
"I'm sorry," Harry said, "I want to take you to a Healer. I want to make you better. I told everyone you killed Dumbledore, and then I told them all you were dead." "You were supposed to think that. I am clearly dreaming. Mental discipline shot to hell. Don't know why you aren't Lily though." He shut his eyes and a tear leaked out of one. "I did it all for her and it's always you in the dreams."