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leela_cat (leela_cat) wrote in snarry100,
@ 2008-05-21 18:44:00

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challenge 110: the five senses - taste, leela_cat

Inheritance Laws: Harry Potter and Severus Snape
Title: Inheritance Laws - Harry Potter and Severus Snape
Author: Leela (leela_cat)
Word Count: 100x2
Rating: G
Challenge #110: The Five Senses: Taste
Warnings: None.
A/N: It's all about what you do with your inheritance. Concrit and feedback always welcome.

Inheritance Laws - Harry Potter

On Harry's twenty-first birthday, he signed for his Black inheritance - with a blood quill. A betrothal contract, binding the Black heir to a dead man, appeared in his hands.

On his twenty-second, at midnight, the unfulfilled contract exacted punishment. Vertigo drove him to his knees. Spikes of pain fried his nervous system.

The ordeal was repeated for an hour every day; except his birthday, when he endured twenty-four hours of agony.

After eight tormented years of unsuccessful research, three children, and a divorce, only the improbable remained. Appearances to the contrary, the Prince heir lived.

Remorse tasted of ashes.

Inheritance laws - Severus Snape

The scroll materialised in mid-air and dropped onto Severus' toasted teacake. He swore. Muttered spells cleansed the parchment and banished the contaminated remnants of his breakfast.

Severus' lips twitched with amusement. Trust Potter to be the only Black heir who reached twenty-one without being disinherited or murdered.

Twelve months later, Severus scowled at the Prophet. The misbegotten whelp had dared to marry the Weasley wench.

He tapped the contract's blood-red seal with his wand and initiated the punishment cycle. When the green-eyed brat finally succumbed, Severus would lead him a merry dance... to the altar.

Success would taste sweet indeed.

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	torino10154 2008-05-22 02:05 am UTC (link)
	Wow. That was intense. I didn't see the second half coming when I read the first. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	leela_cat 2008-05-22 02:14 am UTC (link)
	Umm.. yeah, Possessive!Snape kinda of took over the second, third and fourth drafts of these drabbles. Thank you. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	lexywrites 2008-05-22 03:14 am UTC (link)
	Loved it. Great counterpoint between the two. I particularly appreciated the visual balance, line-and-a-half, then 1 line twice, line-and-a-half, then cut off the end at half a line. Read well out loud, too. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	leela_cat 2008-05-22 03:50 am UTC (link)
	Thank you. You know, I didn't even notice the visual balance when I wrote it. I appreciate you pointing it out. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	lexywrites 2008-05-22 07:51 pm UTC (link)
	It's all about the cadence, I think, in short work. The rhythm is what drives the work. The visuals(like yours) reinforce the mood of the piece by setting the speed for the reader. Okaaay, on rereading it sounds pretentious, but I think you get what I mean. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	leela_cat 2008-05-22 08:35 pm UTC (link)
	Yes, I do get what you mean. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	hpstrangelove 2008-05-22 09:47 am UTC (link)
	Nice one - Harry's part made it good; Severus' part makes it great. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	leela_cat 2008-05-22 02:47 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you. I'm so glad you liked them. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	alisanne 2008-05-22 09:04 pm UTC (link)
	Severus is such a Slytherin. g (Reply to this) (Thread)

	leela_cat 2008-05-23 02:36 am UTC (link)
	Oh absolutely, darling. (Reply to this) (Parent)