This was great fun; very clever. I love the image of Snape standing outdoors with his sleeves and trousers rolled up -- a fine picture of a simple pleasure, the sort he has too long been denied. He's IC at every stage of his memories, and Harry is adorably awkward and funny. You capture a lot of the sort of humor Harry has in canon, as in this line: Croaker simply stood there being a shining example of all the unspeaking they did on Level Nine