Your writing style is absolutely beautiful and you write Snape in a way that follows canon while still making him your own. And yes, I love that you've made him the hero here, that Harry is really just the pawn and Severus is the King.
Your Harry is so wonderfully mature that it's no wonder that Severus would stop seeing him as a boy and begin seeing him as a man. Even your description of the kiss (imperfect and human with the saliva) is haunting.
Thank you so much for submitting this for the fest. It's just brilliant.