You know, irregardless of the comic's contents, I have two suggestions:
One, change this so it has two panels on top, the writer panel in the middle, then the last two at the bottom. Or maybe change it to first panel, next two panels, last two panels (because of the word balloon in the first panel).
Two, I have no idea why but the guy you drew keeps nagging at the back of my head. Why is he so damn familiar? He reminds me of a comic book villain but I can't place who.