great job
Really quite excellent! I had a crappy today day and was thinking that a fic with character death was probably the last thing I wanted to read. I was prepared to hate it, but this is quite a moving story, and very insightful even if it is so damn sad. It is hard enough to get inside Sanzo's head and write in the first person about him when the boys are having a good day, but to do it under these circumstances was downright ambitious, and I think you succeeded. I think it was interesting the way you shifted the tense from present to past at the beginning back again at the end - very effective. The one question I had was did you have a specific time in mind for when in the story arc of the series this would have taken place? I was just curious... maybe I'm over-analyzing (once and English major, always an English major!) This is the first story I have read on this site - I hope there are more from you, and that there are more authors around here that write as well as you do. If so I'll be coming back quite a lot! fullmetalfemme *!* j_hewin@yahoo.com