OHH Thanks!
Oh my gosh! I have been so incredibly absent from insanejournal and my e-mail that I just... I mean JUST saw this reply and Thank You! I just kind of rushed this out to the community to make the deadline, ^_^;; and then I promptly stopped posting to the community due to real life demands and what-not. I still fully intend to reapply and finish my prompts, if I can, but it's a lot to deal with right now.
Having said that, again, thank you so very much for pointing these mistakes out, it's incredibly helpful, you have no idea. I'm actually in the process of reediting this and fleshing it out to its full length and this will certainly go a long way to helping with that!
I'm glad you enjoyed this and Thanx for your help.