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brianswalk (brianswalk) wrote in qaf_drabbles,
@ 2007-09-26 20:45:00

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author: brianswalk, challenge #32: eating out

Challenge #32 Eating Out
Title: Another Time
Author: Brianswalk
Condom: Brian

Another Time

He let the memories wash over him.

A boy of five or six years.
Loud bottle blonde waitress.
She pinched his cheeks and gave him extra vanilla ice cream on his apple pie.
Laughing with his Pops and Uncle Kevin over last night’s Pirates game.
Before everything went so very wrong.

“I said, I’m not eating here.”
Justin’s voice pulled him out of his reverie.
Brian stared wistfully through the windshield at the faded diner sign and worn out building. Dust from the parking lot settling on the `vette’s pristine surface.
“No,” Brian replied. “I thought this was another place.”

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	secretsolitaire 2007-09-27 02:59 am UTC (link)
	Ohhh. This is a really nice drabble -- understated and wistful. hugs Brian (Reply to this) (Thread)

	brianswalk 2007-09-27 10:19 am UTC (link)
	If he would open up to Justin, Justin could hug his pain away. Stupid Brian. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	noteverything 2007-09-28 04:15 am UTC (link)
	Awww. pouts for Brian (Reply to this) (Thread)

	brianswalk 2007-09-29 01:36 am UTC (link)
	I'd like to think he has some happy childhood memories, even if they're tempered by the bad. Thanks for commenting. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	noteverything 2007-09-29 02:59 am UTC (link)
	Me too! It would be so heartbreaking if he'd never been a happy kid. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	not_yet_defined 2007-09-28 05:04 am UTC (link)
	so different...in a good way. sighs sadly for brian (Reply to this) (Thread)

	brianswalk 2007-09-29 01:40 am UTC (link)
	I was trying to do something different, but lack the training to know exactly what/how I was doing. Know what I mean? I think it came out OK. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	shadownyc 2007-09-28 10:27 am UTC (link)
	WOW! That was a lot of emotion and backstory in just 100 words. Great job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	brianswalk 2007-09-29 01:43 am UTC (link)
	That was a lot of emotion and backstory in just 100 words. Thank you, Shadow. It killed me to cut out some of what I edited. I'm big on dialog, so putting in details and imagery is a real challenge for me. I'm glad ir worked. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	herefordroad 2007-10-07 04:16 pm UTC (link)
	everything about brian's childhood and earlier years fills me with sadness. sensitively written...so much power in 100 words. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	brianswalk 2007-10-07 04:23 pm UTC (link)
	I wanted to challenge myself and avoid my usual snarky writing. I'm sorta pleased with how this turned out. Thanks for the feedback, Jeannie. (Reply to this) (Parent)