I am very lucky because entire sections of this were new to me. First of all, the whole story and all the locations it's set in were just lovely. It really felt like Percy through and through. Neville, too, was incredibly in character. He was so nice and so strong and completely unwilling to take any shit. I love him. All of your dialogue was realistic, right down to opting for no eye contact. It was sweet without being the slightest bit saccharine. Percy's progression of figuring shit out, and his persistency in going after Neville are fantastic. The Owl? That's hilarious. Very believable career he carved out for himself there.
O how much! How much did I love the sex scene! They're falling around breaking shit and then they got all sticky and Neville thought of Percy's glasses and Percy's no bullshit profession of love... just gorgeous. And the last line is awesome.