No wonder you didn't want to put this chapter on FF.net, most of people out there are around 15 years old.
Anyway, about the chapter. Well, it was literally fucking awesome. I was really curious how you were going to write the sex scene. The tension has been building up for quite a few chapters and the climax was great- short, brutal, down to the topic. Although I loved the whole mini-series of Rocket's and Sinedd's mortal bed combat I'm glad that's it's finally over and so excited to see what happens next.
That was very clever of you to make Sinedd so deprived of emotions once he had realized that there is no point in fighting any longer. He did pretty much nothing and yet we've learned so much about him. His apathy was a sad thing that again showed how mentally dysfunctional Sinedd really is. He isn't much more sane that Rocket, just in a different way, methinks.
And Rocket. Hell yeah, a complete fall from grace. In previous chapters you used more adjectives describing his eyes etc., making the story more sensual so to speak. And now, in the great final of the mortal bed combat saga the language suddenly is more curt. Rocket's pov shows the reader how Rocket is slowly turning into an animal. It's a interesting fact that he got so hard only by hurting Sinedd, or that he didn't really know how to get things done, just had the basic idea (probably form reading manga). They way he penetrated Sinedd so roughly was shocking, I wonder if Rocket realises how much pain he had inflicted on Sinedd.
The idea of Sinedd detaching himself mentally form the whole situation was a great one, it reminded me somehow of the scene when he told D'Jok that he has no parents. It also seemed as if he was talking about the weather. I must say that you're really good at writing psychological stuff. And porn xD
Now I really excited about the future chapters. Because I believe that there will be more... (gives an evil eye) Episode 'Fluxless' is my favorite episode, I can't wait to see how you will write Artegor's reaction to Sinedds injury, or Steven's arrogance in the end of the game. Man, it's going to be like christmas, only better and without old men stuck in the chimney.