Loki (fiorvalr) wrote in noexits, @ 2022-05-02 08:33:00 |
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Looked over your recent thesis chapter. Overall, it's sufficient. A little verbose in some of the wordage and you tend to overdramatize the semantics, but I suppose that's to be expected of a humanities major. There are a few instances where you should probably consider citing your source because I think you missed a few footnotes. I've noted those. All in all, an enjoyable read. Could be a bit more persuasive in the closing paragraph, but I assume you'll adjust that when you get to the concluding chapter of your project. Did find a few errors of syntax, but maybe you were trying to go with the modern vernacular? I don't know. Felt a little jarring.
In other news, are you working on a plan to break me out of prison? Also, please bring some chocolate next time you visit. Thanks! ♥
WHERE ARE YOU??? WHAT AM I STILL DOING IN PRISON? SHOULDN'T YOU BE HERE TO CONSOLE ME OR SOMETHING? If I find out you're off playing house with your fake kids, I will lose my ever-loving mind. DID YOU KNOW THOR IS IN LOS ANGELES? HE JUST LEFT ME HERE! HE WON'T EVEN COME BREAK ME OUT! [...] You do know who I am, right? Like ... the real me? As opposed to the 10,000 other versions of myself in my head right now.
Are we really following the rules here? Because then I want another attorney.