I think you did an excellent job in depicting the feel of Snupin (or...at least...how I usually view the pairing). That tension of love-hate, that eventually, inevitably, is revealed as love (or something like it). But, alas, a troubled and likely doomed love. I don't know why, but I find their heart-wrenching pain delicious. So, I found this work of yours to be quite delicious. Much like Snape found Lupin's anger (and lips?) to be. *grin*