I really LIKE that Harry ripped into Remus, as this story picks up from DH. Generally, I didn't like Remus' DH characterization and don't agree with it, but if we're keeping in canon, yeah, that part worked. As did the idea that Severus would go mad from the strain.
One thing, though. If this story is eventually going to go NC17, it needs to be posted to bymoonlight, not here on Lupin_Snape. Please move your next chapters to that community. Thanks!