Regarding Fay; I know he's calmer and more mature in the time you picked him up from, but sometimes he seems like he's high to me. Cause he's just so calm and pleasant about everything, it seems a little odd? (this is such a weird crit) I just can't see the other side of him that also developed, the one that makes him punch Kurogane in the head and grin and be all straight-forward and kickass.
It also seemed strange that he was so calm when meeting Sakura again. After the scene with all of them remembering Sakura, I find it hard to believe that Kurogane or Fay wouldn't just squish Sakura until she can't breathe if they met her again.
And just a little nitpick, it bothers me that he still uses all the variations of nicknames that he used before Tokyo happened, because after the epic punch in Nihon Country, he's only called him "Kuro-sama".
Other than that, I'd really love to see more of your Syaoran, because I think you're really good at playing him. And your Touya is great and I love the threads with little Sakura and Yukito.