Funnily, the first thing that struck me right between the eyes was the lovely characterisations. I am not fond of how writers usually portray Charlie - sex-god-extraordinaire-and-little-else. But I love how you depicted him - mature, tender, giving and very self-aware. I enjoyed the descriptions of his conflicted feelings towards his mother and the entire set-up at the Burrow - you wrote them so realistically.
For the first time I've liked Charlie Weasley in fanfic. And Teddy was a pleasure to read. And oh yeah, hee, the sex was delicious!