Oh man, wow. There is just so much to this that trying to encompass it all in one comment is going to be a challenge of epic proportions. First, your Dudley's evolution as a character was... perfect. Not too fast, tons of bumps along the way, just exactly as it should have been written. It was realistic without trying to be anything else (I didn't get the sense that you were trying to be ~omg so edgy~ with this... it was just a character being a character and trying to change his life). The relationship between Harry and Dudley was the same. I really felt like I could see where things were leading without feeling dragged along. It was slow and steady and perfect. Really, that's what this fic is: perfect. Perfect characterizations, perfect minor characters (Dean and Arabella FTW!!), perfect pace, perfect setting. Excellent fic, perfect for this fest!
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