Oh, Mystery Author, you went exactly as deep as I'd wanted! This is so realistic, the awkwardness, the tension. You have a very interesting way of using repetition to drive a point home that was very appropriate here.
Okay, and the idea of Minerva picking up women in bars (or perhaps being picked up, haha)is just so wonderful that I don't even know how to express my glee. You've totally hit my kink for realistic lesbians like you don't even know! Thanks so much! ♥