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atdelphi ([info]atdelphi) wrote in [info]hp_beholder,
@ 2014-05-07 12:58:00

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Entry tags:aberforth dumbledore, aberforth dumbledore/severus snape, beholder 2014, fic, rated:nc17, severus snape, slash

FIC: "A Gramarye of Folk Magic" for evensong14
Recipient: [info]evensong14
Author/Artist: ???
Title: A Gramarye of Folk Magic
Rating: NC-17
Pairings: Aberforth Dumbledore/Severus Snape
Word Count: 5818
Medium: Fic
Warnings/Content Information (Highlight to View): [Transactional sex; a brief scene of animal sacrifice; references to suicide]*.
Summary: Time moves with the seasons in Hogsmeade, and season by season the Snape boy returns to Aberforth's inn.
Author's/Artist's Notes: I would like to thank my beta, F, for all her help. I really hope you enjoy this story, [info]evensong14. Thank you for the inspiring prompts.



In what would prove to be the final days of the war, Aberforth’s brother entrusted to his keeping a hide-bound book, a stoppered silver phial the size of a finger bone, and a 21-year-old boy of uncertain provenance. This last turned up at the Hog’s Head on a morning in early August, and Aberforth, upon examining him, rendered the same judgment he had with the book and the phial. Didn’t look like much. Obviously valuable nonetheless. Most likely dangerous.

"Severus Snape," the boy said, introducing himself with an awkward bow. "Mr. Wulfric advised me you had a room to let."

They had met before, although not formally. Aberforth had kicked him out once, a year or so back. The boy hadn’t filled out much since then, still sickly looking and young enough in the face to pass for a student. His lank black hair hung in his eyes. Snape. The name wasn’t familiar, but he bore an unmistakable resemblance to Septimus Prince who raised those nice Dalesbreds down in Plumswick.

"There's a room," Aberforth agreed, "provided you or Mr. Wulfric is paying upfront."

The boy hadn't been trusted with silver. That was Aberforth's first clue. A sealed note of credit was procured from a greasy pocket, and Aberforth read it through with a jaundiced eye. According to Albus' instructions, the room was to be held indefinitely, with food and drink provided until September. The boy was a new hire, whatever else he might be.

"Good enough," Aberforth said.

He motioned for the boy to pick up his trunk and led him upstairs. There were three rooms besides his own, none of them currently occupied. No one was traveling these days if they could help it. He chose the one at the end of the hallway, which rented the cheapest despite having the better view. Inside were an iron bed, a stained rug, and a table--the unofficial motto of the Hog's Head Inn being 'Beggars Can't Be Choosers'.

"The sheets are clean," he said. "Towels are in the bathroom. I usually lock the front door by eleven o'clock."

The boy did not reply. He had set his trunk down on the bed and was staring at it vaguely. There was a certain expression shared by those who had never expected to find themselves here, in a room like this one, but this was the first time Aberforth had seen it on the face of somebody with boots that shabby.

He left him to it.

Downstairs, the stillness of the day had made the kitchen stuffy. He propped open the back door to let some air in and sat down at the table with a cup of water and one fresh egg from the basket. He breathed onto the speckled shell and rubbed it all over with his thumb before cracking it open. The contents slid into the cup, which he tilted this way and that, peering at the shapes the white made in the water. A bright red clot of blood stained the middle of the yolk.

Aberforth snorted. It figured.

The remainder of the day passed quietly enough. The boy kept upstairs, his presence marked only by the occasional creak of the bed when he sat or rose. Business was slow: two customers in the late afternoon and one in the early evening. Tamerlane Blott usually did his after-work drinking at the Three Broomsticks, but he patronized the Hog's Head whenever his wife was under the impression he was sober. Aberforth poured him his medicine and waited him out. When Blott had finished, he closed up early and made supper.

"There's food," he called up from the foot of the stairs.

The bed creaked again. The floorboards squeaked. The pipes gave a rattle as the boy washed up. Aberforth placed a pair of roast beef and horseradish sandwiches on a plate at one of the corner tables before starting in on restocking the bar. The boy came downstairs haltingly. He stopped just shy of the table. His gaze darted in suspicion from the drawn curtains to the barred door and then to Aberforth.

"It's hardly worth the cost of oil to stay open on a Wednesday," Aberforth said. "If you're going out, use the back door."

The boy didn’t budge. "I expect you're to report on my comings and goings."

It was a put-on accent, Aberforth decided. Good, but not perfect. He had slipped a little on 'report'.

"I expect so," Aberforth replied, mimicking the plummy tone.

The mockery seemed lost on the boy. His dark gaze fixed upon Aberforth as if he were measuring him up for a set of robes. Or maybe a coffin. It was a shrewd look. That was what decided things. If it had been sullen, Aberforth might have had the decency to put his foot down and forestall the offer he suspected was coming. If it had been desperate, he would have washed his hands of the whole business and sent the boy packing back to Albus. But 'shrewd' was something else.

Something like narrowed eyes, a not-unattractive mouth, and more trouble than coin for room and board was going to compensate him for.

He was not surprised when he was joined behind the counter. Up close, the boy smelled like summer sweat. The bridge of his nose was oily, and his cheeks were flushed. His hands, when they worked their way into Aberforth's clothing, were cold.

The boy's touch was openly disdainful. That suited him fine--better than the alternative anyhow. A few tugs were enough to get him half hard. A sneer hooked the corner of the boy's lips, there for an instant and then out of sight as he folded to his knees and put his mouth to other work.

Arousal shied away for an instant and then lurched forward, sliding wetly from the pit of his stomach to the hot drag of the boy's tongue. He wasn't a novice, Snape. He wasn't going to make any money off it, but he wasn't a novice and Aberforth was not a saint. His hands settled on the boy's bony shoulders. He looked down at the dark head bobbing gracelessly. There was a touch of pink sunburn where the hair parted.

It served Albus right, he thought, imagining his brother's righteous disgust at the scene. All this cape and saber, too many chessmen and no board. He came after a few minutes of messy sucking, his fingers digging into the back of the boy’s neck. He had pegged the boy for a spitter, but he swallowed with a short, nasal sound of disgust.

That was all. The boy pulled off and sat on his haunches. He wiped his mouth with the back of his hand but otherwise did not look overly put out. If he was trying to make sure his bread was buttered on both sides, Aberforth supposed that sucking cock was probably less of an imposition than whatever he'd had to do for Albus.

His groin still throbbing, he buttoned back up. His gaze swept across the shelf, and on a whim he took down a bottle of Salamander as the boy climbed gracelessly to his feet. It was the good stuff, too fine to be wasted on the young, but he was in a sore enough mood to relish the thought of putting it on Albus' bill. He set a glass on the counter, filled it with two fingers of the whiskey, and presented it to the boy.

"It’ll get the taste out of your mouth.”

The boy glared at him and then at the glass. He took it nonetheless and sniffed at the contents. He drank, and his reddened lips pulled back in a quickly stifled grimace, as though the cure was worse than the complaint. Almost as far from thirty as from ten, Aberforth thought, and he privately damned his brother. He then damned the boy as well for whatever he had done to land himself here.

Damning himself, of course, went without saying.

\\\*///


The boy haunted the place for the rest of the summer, an unsettled shade who stole bread and jam from the kitchen in the middle of the night and left wet footprints in the bathroom in the morning. He came and went at odd hours. Mostly kept to himself. At the beginning of September, he moved up to the castle to take over for Horace Slughorn, who had finally seen enough sense to retire. He left his trunk and whatever was locked up in it behind, and Aberforth grudgingly took a deposit on a key. The sounds of pacing overhead were replaced by the occasional turning of the lock on the kitchen door. The boy would disappear into his room for a few minutes or a few hours. The untidy fireplace suggested he was using the Floo, although he never paid Aberforth for any powder.

He always looked tired. Sallow, with purple shadows under his eyes. Not that it was any of Aberforth's business.

The night before the autumn equinox, the boy brought company with him. It was a brisk evening. The air smelled of wet leaves and wood smoke, overlaid inside the Hog's Head with the usual bite of sawdust and spirits. The boy and his two friends sat in the back of the otherwise empty inn. They were cloaked and hooded. Their heads were bent close in confidence, but none of them looked at ease with the intimacy.

They split a bottle of cheap gin between them, going in on it like schoolboys. Aberforth slouched over the counter and smoked his pipe, as good as invisible by virtue of his trade. He caught enough of their muttering to get the general idea of who they were and what they were up to. He kept his wand in close reach.

At the end of the night, the other two left. He got a look at their faces then: one of Helen Rookwood's sons and a heavyset brunet with the Lestrange family chin.

"In or out?" he asked the boy, who was still sitting at the table.

There was no reply. The boy slumped in his chair and gnawed at a fingernail.

"In or out?" Aberforth repeated.

The boy shrugged, glancing up at Aberforth for an instant before returning his gaze to the scars on the tabletop. "I'm expected back at the castle."

"That's not what I asked."

A wary frown twisted in the shadows beneath the boy's hood.

"That's right," Aberforth said, snapping a rag on the counter before using it to wipe up. "One sloppy gobble and I'm yours for life. I've been pining away for you for a month, and now that it's past eleven and you look like a corpse, I plan to have my wicked way with you."

The boy sniffed. He tilted the empty gin bottle, pretending to check whether it was empty, even though Aberforth had seen him pour the last glass himself. He stole a sideways look back at Aberforth, worse than a cat.

"Stay or go," Aberforth said. "I don't care which, but I'm locking that door before those friends of yours decide to come back."

"They wouldn't," the boy said, with the gall to sound offended. He stood up unsteadily. He was a lightweight, or else he had done his drinking on an empty stomach. A few hesitant steps took him to the stairs. He looked back at Aberforth once and then went up to his room.

Aberforth heard the door shut. He counted idly as he wiped down the tables. Thirty-four seconds passed before the boy turned the latch.

He locked the front door and finished tidying up. He poured himself a drink and packed his pipe before going out the back way into the chilly yard. He sat on the step for a while, smoking and drinking and looking up at the light of the stars. The waning moon was the color of old bone. Hogsmeade was quiet. There were no bonfires, no tapping of last year's cider at the Three Broomsticks. He waited until midnight and then crossed the yard to the chicken coop.

The rooster was sleeping with its head out the door, on guard for foxes. It woke swiftly at Aberforth's approach and gave a crotchety cluck at having been disturbed but otherwise acquiesced to being picked up. Aberforth turned it upside down by its legs and broke its neck in one hard pull. He held the bird through its flopping death throes and then carried it back to the inn, where he cut off its head.

There was still a light burning upstairs as Aberforth made a circle of the building, flicking the warm chicken blood from his fingers across the doorways and onto the ledges of the ground floor windows. He thought he saw the curtains move as he passed below, but it was too dark to say for certain. At any rate, the boy did not come downstairs again that night. That was probably for the best.

Aberforth didn’t see any further sign of him until the narrow hours between Halloween and All Soul's. It was raining hard, icy pellets plinking against the windows and the roof. Aberforth almost slept through it when the pair of rooster's spurs hanging by a bit of string from his bedpost began to click together, but he eventually opened his eyes in the darkness. His brain struggled to sort one sound from another.

Someone was at the back door. Someone with a key.

He sat up and reached for his wand on the bedside table. A cudgel leaned against the wall next to it. He picked that up too. The back door opened and then shut quickly. A cold draught drifted upstairs. There were footsteps: only one set. They entered the kitchen. Stopped. Started up again, heading for the staircase and then slowly ascending. They paused once more on the landing and then proceeded past Aberforth's door and into the bathroom.

Aberforth could hear, distantly, the sound of labored breathing. The tap chirped. The sudden flow of the water was thunderously loud in the otherwise quiet house, drowning out the sound of the rain.

The tapping of the spurs slowed and then stopped altogether.

Aberforth set down the cudgel but kept hold of his wand. He pulled on his dressing gown and stepped out into the hallway. He approached the bathroom door and eased it open. It was dark inside, all grey shadows. The boy's clothing lay in a black puddle on the floor. His hunched back was startlingly white as he sat in the tub, curled in on himself, clutching his head.

There was a strange smell. Something burnt. Something like blood too, but sometimes that was only the rust in the pipes.

He shut the door quietly and stepped back. He could not tell what time it was, only that it was not yet morning. The house was cold. He supposed he was awake. He went downstairs with the aim of making himself a cup of tea and stopped to look out the front window. Nothing was on fire, at least nothing here. He put the kettle on and sat down. Upstairs, the water eventually stopped. The rain stepped in to fill the silence. Then came the ugly, broken sound of sobbing.

Aberforth paused in spooning out the tea leaves. Two poisonings and a hanging--that was the tally for his tenure at the Hog's Head. Some people preferred to kill themselves at an inn. It was a comfort, he supposed. You knew it wouldn't be your family who found you. You knew someone would clean up the mess you'd made. He rubbed his wrist absently against his hip and waited for the water to boil.

\\\*///


Come winter, most everyone agreed that You-Know-Who was gone for good. Albus had retrieved the book and the phial, but the boy remained on loan. He returned for the Christmas holiday, his room and board paid up for the week. They never stayed at the school all year, the younger teachers. It was something about the wards--gave them the anemia if they didn't leave now and then. Aberforth, however, imagined that Albus preferred to keep his problems neatly in one place.

It snowed heavily that December. The town lay beneath white blankets and a sky the calm grey of dishwater. The pines swayed on the horizon when the wind blew in from the west. Aberforth was sitting at the kitchen table in the middle of the night, peeling oranges, when he heard footsteps on the stairs. He looked away from the window and the falling flecks of white in the blackness to find the boy slouching in the doorway.

"What are you doing?" the boy asked.

He could have asked the same thing. The boy had his cloak on despite having made noises about going to bed two hours ago.

"Making wassail."

The Hog's Head was not the place for merriment. People went to the Three Broomsticks if they wanted singsongs and good will this time of year. There was no holly on the mantel, no Christmas tree hung with candles. In the festive season, he took it as his solemn duty to maintain his inn as a bastion of lonely misery for those lost souls who preferred to drink themselves ill over the holidays, even in the wake of a victory.

Nonetheless, there were worse things to get drunk on than wassail.

"As long as you're up," Aberforth added, "you could core those apples."

The boy scowled and picked a piece of lint off his robe. "I'm a guest, not the hired help."

Aberforth said nothing. The boy loitered a moment longer. He then hung his cloak up over the back of a chair and slunk over to the butchering block. He picked up the paring knife and proved quick-handed with it. He would have to be, Aberforth supposed, teaching Potions. In went the blade. Around went the apple with a wet, pulpy sound. There was nothing idle about him, despite the late hour. He frowned seriously down at his work and yet seemed to relax as he found his rhythm.

He was a sheep dog, Aberforth decided. That was the way of families like the Princes. They turned out sheep farmers and sheep dogs: the stolid and the sharp. But someone had gone and raised the boy in a town, penned up indoors with too little to do. Small wonder he had become a worrier.

"I was told you didn’t celebrate Christmas," the boy said.

"Were you?" Aberforth asked, flicking stray bits of pith off his fingers. "And who told you that?”

"Albus."

There had been enough of a pause that he knew his brother and the boy were not actually on a first-name basis, or at least not mutually.

"Oh yes? You've been having some nice chats about me, have you?"

"Why not?" The boy glanced at him sourly. "I expect you talk about me."

Aberforth returned the look impassively. "Less than you'd think."

The boy's expression curdled further. "Did you tell him?"

Laughter buoyed up in Aberforth’s chest, but he kept it stifled. His gaze slid down for a moment to the boy's mouth.

"About you sucking my cock? No."

The boy didn't appear to believe him.

Aberforth shrugged. "Why would I? It’s me he’d look down his nose at for taking advantage."

"'Taking advantage'?" The boy’s eyebrows rose.

Aberforth’s mouth twisted. It was nearly a smile. "He believes in true love, my brother."

He expected the boy to smirk. But the look that crossed his face was worse than that.

Aberforth finished stripping the last orange. He stood up and tossed the peel onto the table, where it landed in a coiled ‘s’ amongst the others. He walked slowly up behind the boy, who tensed. A pale hand tightened visibly around the handle of the knife, knuckle bones pressing against the thin skin over top. It was none of Aberforth's business what a boy of twenty-one knew about true love. Or cold-blooded murder, for that matter. He was warm enough when Aberforth touched him. Flesh and blood.

"What are you doing?" the boy asked, rigid.

Aberforth's fingers curled around the corner of a sharp hipbone.

“I was going to offer to wank you off for your trouble. Any objections?”

The boy's shoulders drew together. Aberforth was standing close enough to feel the wave of rage that shook them.

"I don’t need your pity," the boy spat.

"I'm not offering pity. I'm offering a hand job. Take it or leave it."

He was prepared for the boy to push him away, maybe even take a swing at him or draw his wand. What was the season for but getting rebuffed after a sad grope in the kitchen? There was only wary silence for a long moment. Then the boy slowly nodded. His breathing paused as Aberforth got a hand in his robes and down his pants. His cock was soft, cupped in Aberforth’s palm. Whether from nerves or disinterest, it took a fair bit of fondling to get hard, but once it was up, the rest of the business was quick.

The boy hung his head. His back bowed, pressing against Aberforth’s chest. He breathed loudly through his nose, and Aberforth could hear him lick his lips and swallow.

He made no comment when the boy started shivering. He adjusted his grip, his hand moving steadily. His nose brushed the boy’s hair. His own excitement wasn’t much more than a trickle of heat. The hour was too late and his leg was paining him. But it felt good to hold onto someone.

The knife fell from the boy’s slack hand when he came. It thumped dully onto the block and flipped over. The boy finally gave in to his voice, moaning softly, and rocked back on his heels. Aberforth steadied him. His arm looped around the boy’s middle and there it remained for what felt like a while too long, and then a while longer still until the boy squirmed against the contact and drew away.

Afterwards, he washed his hands and got back to work. To his surprise, the boy stayed, peeling and grating the ginger while the apples baked, and then stirring the brew like it was any inebriating draft: four circles widdershins to every eight clockwise, taking care to gently dredge the bottom of the cauldron.

The kitchen soon filled with the smell of warm spices as the wassail simmered, and when Aberforth sat down at the table with a deck of cards, the boy joined him. A few hands of All Fours and a round of Piquet took them through the cold hours and into the dawning of Christmas Day.

\\\*///


The boy returned on the first morning in April that the wind lost its bite. He had an agitated look about him, a reluctant touch of color in his sallow cheeks. Spring made a man feel alive, but that wasn't always a welcome feeling. Aberforth followed him upstairs, carrying his trunk for him, and they spent most of the next three days fucking. There was no real joy in it--only the scratching of a terrible itch as the spitting drizzle turned warm and the heady smell of damp earth got into everything.

On Easter Monday, his girls went into labor. Dahlia first, followed by Primrose and then little Rosemary. They bore three sets of twins, one after the other, in just as quick a succession as they had aborted stunted singletons for the last two years running. The boy sidled up to him in the yard while Rosemary was straining with her second in the goat shed.

The boy sat down on the bed, his knees apart, looking up at Aberforth through the veil of his hair.

Though the sun was only a pale disc behind the cloud cover, the boy was squinting. He looked hung over but smelled of nothing but sweaty sheets. The boy left a few feet between them as he leaned the fence. He looked at Rosemary and the blood-streaked little doe already sitting up in the straw. The second kid was crowning. The boy tilted his head, peering at it, and subsided when saw the two front hooves appear in good order.

Aberforth glanced his way.

"What?" the boy asked sharply.

Aberforth shrugged and returned to watching Rosemary. "Had livestock on the family estate, did you?"

The mockery did not fly so far over the boy's head this time as upon their first meeting, but it still failed to land. From the corner of his eye, he could sense the boy peering at him, obviously trying to suss out if he was being made sport of.

It was all teeth and tangled clothing. The boy left bruises as he pulled at him. Left a bloody crescent where he bit down on Aberforth's shoulder. Left Aberforth's cock chafed from screwing between his thighs.

"I holidayed on a farm once, when I was young," the boy finally said.

When he was young, he said, as if he wasn't still soft-skinned and hardly able to grow a beard even after three days of idling in bed. Aberforth was old enough to want to smile at such a thing, and not enough of a knob to actually do it.

"Goats?" he asked.

"Sheep."

"What kind?"

The boy shrugged. "How should I know? Big black-faced ones. Dalebreds. Something like that."

The boy curled up under him, tugging brutally at himself. Bastard, he called him--no, that was later, lying on the kitchen table with his gawky legs around Aberforth’s waist. Up in the bedroom, he had only groaned. An anguished sound.

"I was conscripted to deliver one of the lambs," the boy confided, frowning. "The farmer needed someone with small hands."

"Breech?" Aberforth asked.

The boy nodded. "I had to pull it out by its hind legs. It was still in the caul. The farmer held the mother's head, but she kicked me hard enough to break my leg."

Aberforth pictured him as he must have been: a wisp of a thing in a borrowed, oversized work shirt. Straw stuck to his little bloody hands. His jaw set against blubbering as his grandfather swung the lamb to clear out the waters. A broken leg would have to wait until the new arrival was breathing and the ewe had given suck.

Panting. Sweat. A handful of come wiped off on the sheets.

The kid finally dropped. It was a good-sized little buck, maybe nine pounds. It landed hard in the straw and lay still.

"Is it dead?" the boy asked.

There was nothing but flat curiosity in his voice. Nonetheless, it rooted out the faded memory of a broken songbird cradled in soft, delicate hands. A rabbit kit, dead of fright. Crushed butterflies. Ariana had been tender-hearted enough to weep every time, but he supposed the boy could likely slit a lamb's throat just as dispassionately as he could deliver it. The thought was comforting, and he felt a stirring of fondness. There was nothing a man like him could do to hurt a boy like this.

"No," he replied as the little buck rallied. "Sometimes it just takes them a while to get over the shock."

The bite mark was still throbbing, refusing to heal even three days later. It didn't quite feel like it was infected, but it broke open and started bleeding again as the kids wobbled to their feet and sought out their mother's teat. He felt a wet bead trickle down to his collar bone.

"Bloody hay fever," the boy mumbled, rubbing at his red-rimmed eyes as Aberforth climbed off him.

\\\*///


In the summer, the boy came and went as he pleased. Sometimes he was gone for hours, and sometimes he was gone for days. Aberforth supposed he was meant to mention this to his brother, but he didn't. Not when the boy came back smelling of the seaside, and not when he came back smelling of the city--of cigarette smoke and petrol. They had an arrangement, after all, and the war was as over as it was going to get.

On the morning the honeycomb was finally full, Aberforth looked up from the yard and caught sight of the boy at the upstairs window. He hadn't been there at breakfast, his door locked and the room behind it silent. It was a clear day, and most of the colony was out foraging, taking advantage of the break in the rain. Aberforth's pipe hung from the corner of his mouth, gently wafting smoke before him. The homebodies swarmed him peaceably when he opened up the hive. They wove around him and settled on his arms and shoulders, their tiny legs tickling the backs of his hands. They hummed, and he murmured in tune with them until they stood still.

It was a good harvest. The colony had been at the lavender this year, and a hint of rich, thick sweetness perfumed the air. He removed two frames for himself and left the colony the rest of their bounty.

"Shoo," he whispered. "Shoo."

The bees took flight and drowsed their way back to the hive.

"You too," he ordered, and a straggler crept out from beneath his shirt collar.

Inside, the kitchen was cool and dark by contrast. The pipes were making a nuisance of themselves, with the particular rattle-and-gulp that usually accompanied an attempt to run the shower head. Aberforth sat for a time, uncapping beeswax from the comb with his knife. The frames were propped up over the honey-catch to drain, dripping amber into the jars below. The clatter of the plumbing eventually stopped.

Aberforth was halfway up the stairs when the boy emerged from the bathroom. He wore only a towel knotted around his narrow waist, and his hair was sodden. His eyes were tired, but not exhausted. He had slept somewhere last night, Aberforth decided, or at least for part of it.

"Why is it so hot in here?" the boy grumbled. "This is supposed to be Scotland and it's only ten o'clock."

"It isn't hot," Aberforth said, joining him on the landing and reaching out to press the back of his hand to the lukewarm dampness of the boy's neck. "London was hot and you haven't cooled down yet."

London had been a guess, but the shadow of annoyance that crossed the boy's face confirmed it. Aberforth smiled. He was too easy sometimes.

The boy sniffed and carried on to his room, but not without a glance over his shoulder. He shut the door behind him but didn't turn the latch. Aberforth took it as an invitation, and when he followed him inside, he found the boy face-down on the bed with his head pillowed in his arms. His towel lay on the floor.

Aberforth looked him over slowly, interest rousing, and then went to the window and opened it up to let the breeze in. "Is that better, your highness?"

The boy gave Aberforth an ill-tempered look from one eye. "No."

Despite this, a line of goose bumps had risen along the backs of the boy’s arms and thighs by the time Aberforth sat down on the bed. He traced them, and then walked his fingertips down the boy's knobbly spine, stopping at the hollow made by the small of his back. He warmed up as he thought of the chalk, of milder summers in the south. Wet spots formed on the pillow from dripping hair. He licked a droplet from the boy's shoulder.

"Fine," the boy sighed. He managed to sound rather put-upon for someone already fidgeting to accommodate a hard-on.

"Fine," Aberforth echoed.

He stroked the boy’s arse and then spread his cheeks apart. He caught a glimpse of a blotchy flush spreading from collarbone to cheek. The boy stopped glaring over his shoulder and hid his face in his arms. His arse was the only part of him with any meat to spare. Not even the thriftiest butcher could find a good chop on him, but he had enough to grab on to in back. Aberforth squeezed a cheek, leaving a pink mark that was slow to fade. The cleft in between was dark, and the boy swallowed audibly when Aberforth drew his thumb along it.

He leaned down and put his mouth there. The boy sucked in a sharp lungful and made to protest, but then seemed to think better of it. He squirmed against Aberforth's tongue, his breathing growing thicker and his hips grinding down against the bed. Aberforth pushed a hand under him and gave him his palm, rubbing his cock as he licked him.

The boy swore quietly into the pillow, his back arching.

He took his time. The inn wasn't due to open for another hour, and even the sort who patronized the Hog’s Head likely had better things to do on a morning like this than get an early start on their drinking. He gave the boy a good seeing to, working him up until he was twitching back there and moaning--if those creaking, low sounds from deep in his throat could be properly called moaning.

There was a jar of ointment tucked away under the bed. Strictly speaking, the boy had stolen it from him. One day it had been in the medicine cabinet and the next it was here, aiding in the occasional bout of buggery and the boy’s nightly habit. It was from the apothecary, and he could have billed Albus for the loss if he was that petty. Today, he decided he wasn't. He reached for it when his jaw was starting to ache and his neck was on the edge of a crick.

The boy panted softly. His legs spread further apart. One naked foot pushed restlessly at the rumpled counterpane.

Aberforth undressed and folded his clothes over the end of the bed. He scraped the bottom of the jar for the last smears and then stroked himself until he was hard. The boy sighed at the first push of his fingers, and then muttered something that might have been "Finally" when Aberforth got his cock in him.

Despite his claims about the weather, he had no complaints at having Aberforth draped over him. His back was cool and damp against Aberforth's chest. He smelled of birch tar soap, and somewhere behind it, clinging to Aberforth's abandoned shirt or rising up from the kitchen was the scent of honey. The bed shifted beneath them as they rocked together unhurriedly, as lazy as the faint breeze that was nudging the wispy clouds home from their temporary holiday. Outside, the bees droned in the remaining sunshine, gorging themselves on the wild roses and clover as the day moved on, slow and golden.


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[info]evensong14
2014-05-07 09:32 pm UTC (link)
Just a quick rush through to let you know I've read this once even though I should have waited, but I couldn't stop myself. I'm in love with this story from first word to last. Love. The prose is so beautiful, not a word wasted, the details so breathtaking in their emotional shrewdness and vivid landscaping and the characterization - good God, it's perfect. The sort of characterization that hits all my buttons. I'm fluttering like mad with the need to give you more thorough feedback, but I don't have time today. So this is a promissory note for later, when I'm free to come back and lavish on this fic all the attention it so richly deserves.

Whoever you are, you're brilliant. And I am extraordinarily lucky. *jumps for joy*

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[info]evensong14
2014-05-19 09:39 am UTC (link)
Oh dear. This is insanely long, so please bear with me and indulge my need to flail.


This is a difficult story to leave feedback on, because it's so astonishingly right and perfect: every word, every part deserves praise, and I feel as if I have too much to say and that the need to say it all leaves me tongue-tied. It's so exquisitely balanced and inflected, with a cumulative effect far greater than one would expect from fewer than 6000 words. The distilled prose scatters passing hints in plain sight, deliciously subtle without sacrificing clarity (I say 'delicious' because the subtlety and underplayed emotion are handled with such skill that it makes me squirm with pleasure.) The tenor of mind is pure Aberforth, conjuring the limits of his world but not of his knowledge; there's also a narrative distance from him, detachment of a sort, that allows a larger perspective on each nuance of character and each glancing allusion to canon without manipulating the text or spoonfeeding the reader. It's all implicit, and it repays the act of reading into it, of allowing all those hints to build in power without ever breaking the suspense or forcing the characters into unseemly confession.

Also, I adore outsider POVs, and as a sharp and unsentimental portrait of young Snape, this gives that impression of fresh eyes and unexpected angles, informed by Aberforth's familiarity with his brother's methods, if not his exact intentions. His pragmatic hands-off policy regarding the boy's guilt and fate, not to mention the separate question of Albus' responsibility and offstage judgment, makes the sexual intimacy more poignant, an apparently forthright physical release complicated by literally everything else that brings them together. But at least it comes (not a pun!) without a price tag. I also love the contrast with canon, in which we get a boy's-eye view of an adult Snape, whereas here we have a nonagenarian's view of a Snape just past boyhood, incredibly young and self-absorbed but dragging behind him the consequences of horrific mistakes most people can't even fathom. Aberforth, of course, can. His world-weariness and his acceptance of damage as an inescapable part of life make him the perfect custodian of Snape's struggle to survive this year. He's a farmer who practices co-existence; a naturalist trained to observe but not rescue, except insofar as his mere presence gives the boy sustenance, and his understanding, however little Snape himself understands as yet, creates a more compassionate environment than whatever the boy is getting at Hogwarts.

I'm going to single out some of my favorite moments, which will be at the expense of all my other favorite moments, because there's nothing here that doesn't in some way fascinate, tease, enlighten, impress, startle, and take my breath away. Just so you know.

Didn’t look like much. Obviously valuable nonetheless. Most likely dangerous. Just like that, Aberforth has me in his pocket. This is a wonderfully astute summary, delivered with brevity and sharpness. It also delights me that he identifies Snape through his family resemblance to the sheep-breeding Princes.

The boy hadn't been trusted with silver. That was Aberforth's first clue. So many small, pointed hints reflected here: the economy with which you show Snape's ambiguous status, Albus' caution in removing temptation from his path, Snape's poverty and perhaps avarice treated as a given, and the fact that Aberforth isn't in the know but is obviously in the habit of assessing his brother's projects even as he grudgingly acquiesces.

There was a certain expression shared by those who had never expected to find themselves here, in a room like this one, but this was the first time Aberforth had seen it on the face of somebody with boots that shabby. Ah, this squeezes my heart a little. It reminds me that Snape sold his teenage soul in order to escape a childhood full of shabby boots and cheerless rooms, and now he's staring at an endless vista of servitude and emptiness filled with iterations of shabby boots and rundown beds. I love that Aberforth leaves him to it without a word, incurious and not presuming to jolly him out of it. And that he immediately seeks and finds confirmation of a bad omen.

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[info]evensong14
2014-05-19 09:41 am UTC (link)
whenever his wife was under the impression he was sober The dry wit is perfectly deployed. As is the amusing name Tamerlane Blott.

The entire first encounter between Aberforth and his guest hits every note spot-on. It was a put-on accent, Aberforth decided. Good, but not perfect. He had slipped a little on 'report'.
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"I expect so," Aberforth replied, mimicking the plummy tone. This is one of the swiftest and best summings-up of Snape's accent change I've read. It's just right that this would be what spurs Aberforth to mockery, and it's even better that the mockery goes right over Snape's head; he really isn’t that experienced, certainly not in social niceties. His cleverness and social-climbing are weirdly naïve, which isn't at all the same thing as 'innocent.'

It was a shrewd look. That was what decided things. If it had been sullen, Aberforth might have had the decency to put his foot down and forestall the offer he suspected was coming. If it had been desperate, he would have washed his hands of the whole business and sent the boy packing back to Albus. But 'shrewd' was something else.

Oh god, this description nails Snape down and doesn't let him get away. It's wry and cruel and sad, but at the same time the opportunism Aberforth perceives is what saves Snape from being merely wretched; he plays his own games (badly) and strikes his own bargains (cluelessly), and those around him treat him accordingly. It's survivor's graft, and Aberforth knows the terms better than he does. In the background, Albus' presence and righteous disapproval hovers over both of them, adding a strange defiance to the whole exchange. If he was trying to make sure his bread was buttered on both sides, Aberforth supposed that sucking cock was probably less of an imposition than whatever he'd had to do for Albus. Again, so concise, and it speaks volumes for Aberforth's opinion of his brother's use of the hired help, and suggests that he's not indifferent to the scapegrace's plight

he was in a sore enough mood to relish the thought of putting it on Albus' bill. I do love Aberforth's petty revenge on Albus, and the complexity of his mood that partly depends on his own choice to enter into compromising acts. I also love the oily bridge of Snape's nose, his cold hands, disdainful touch, and the pink sunburn in his parted hair.

Almost as far from thirty as from ten, Aberforth thought, and he privately damned his brother. He then damned the boy as well for whatever he had done to land himself here.
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Damning himself, of course, went without saying. So much buried pain. So much history repeating itself. And they're both so bloody laconic, although Snape would undoubtedly believe he's the only one damned here. Of course, Aberforth knows better, and the story makes it his cross to bear.

"One sloppy gobble and I'm yours for life. I've been pining away for you for a month, and now that it's past eleven and you look like a corpse, I plan to have my wicked way with you." Ahahaha, how could Snape not fall head over heels? And then stealing a glance, "worse than a cat." I adore the teasing, and Snape's calculation that must be as close to flirting as he ever gets. And the shadow cast by him bringing Death Eaters to the inn, prompting Aberforth to withhold his favors and resort to blood magic.

The scene in which Snape takes refuge in the bath after the tragedy at Godric's Hollow is beautifully understated and heartwrenching. His overwhelming loneliness is terrible, and although Aberforth leaving him to his misery may be a kindness, the sense that he wouldn't interfere if the boy chose to kill himself is chilling. It suggests he knows Snape has done something worth killing himself for. Still, it's more respectful than Albus taking advantage of Snape's grief to manipulate him into service. (Excuse me while I sit here and grind my axe.)

It was something about the wards--gave them the anemia if they didn't leave now and then. This tossed-off bit of magical lore tickles me.

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[info]evensong14
2014-05-19 09:45 am UTC (link)
he took it as his solemn duty to maintain his inn as a bastion of lonely misery for those lost souls who preferred to drink themselves ill This made me snort; no one could put it better, and it's got that self-aware, sourpuss humor that betrays Aberforth's sympathy for outcasts and underdogs.

There had been enough of a pause that he knew his brother and the boy were not actually on a first-name basis, or at least not mutually. This is another of those perfect, pinned-down moments that compresses whole relationships into a deceptively simple observation.

And then, oh my goodness, the scene at Christmas: Aberforth’s mouth twisted. It was nearly a smile. "He believes in true love, my brother."

He expected the boy to smirk. But the look that crossed his face was worse than that.

(…) It was none of Aberforth's business what a boy of twenty-one knew about true love. Or cold-blooded murder, for that matter.
It's like a physical blow, because Snape's comings and goings and little airs and sullen sidlings have been tolerated as one might a child's moods. But this moment shifts the ground; the painful irony is suddenly intolerable, and Aberforth extends mercy as if administering medicine.

"I'm not offering pity. I'm offering a hand job. Take it or leave it."

(…) What was the season for but getting rebuffed after a sad grope in the kitchen?
Aberforth's voice is one of the great triumphs and pleasures of this fic. His sarcasm is a joy, his stoic pessimism infinitely attractive.

Spring made a man feel alive, but that wasn't always a welcome feeling. Aberforth followed him upstairs, carrying his trunk for him, and they spent most of the next three days fucking. There was no real joy in it--only the scratching of a terrible itch as the spitting drizzle turned warm and the heady smell of damp earth got into everything. Another example of an entire short story condensed into one paragraph. The stubbornly unromantic, utilitarian approach to the flesh is exactly what's needed. Snape, facing his first spring after Lily's death, has to learn to live with being alive, feeling life stir even against his will. And sexual release is as good a way as any of hiding an emotional breakdown.

When he was young, he said, as if he wasn't still soft-skinned and hardly able to grow a beard even after three days of idling in bed. Aberforth was old enough to want to smile at such a thing, and not enough of a knob to actually do it. My heart melted all over them at this moment; such temporary sweetness is meant to be cherished.

he supposed the boy could likely slit a lamb's throat just as dispassionately as he could deliver it. The thought was comforting, and he felt a stirring of fondness. There was nothing a man like him could do to hurt a boy like this. Although I'd say Aberforth is just as capable; capable, for example, of breaking a rooster's neck to ritually distribute its blood. And I think he doth protest too much about the impossibility of hurting this boy. Defense mechanisms, perhaps.

The conversation about Snape helping to deliver a breech birth is fascinating, the perfect backstory touch. He's not squeamish or sentimental, and he works hard; he'd fit right into a farm where death is an accepted part of life.

"You too," he ordered, and a straggler crept out from beneath his shirt collar. A lovely piece of whimsy that made me smile.

He managed to sound rather put-upon for someone already fidgeting to accommodate a hard-on. This is so Snape, grouchy and loath to admit he wants something. Which makes the act of hiding his face almost touching. You do a fantastic job of reminding us, again and again, how young he is, still experiencing so many things for the very first time.

It was from the apothecary, and he could have billed Albus for the loss if he was that petty. Today, he decided he wasn't. Always that tension in the background, except today the boy matters more than whatever debt Albus owes Aberforth.

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[info]evensong14
2014-05-19 09:47 am UTC (link)
I genuinely love how this ends with the lingering scent of honey and of their unhurried fucking, the sense of hot, drowsy days stretching before them and Aberforth taking care of 'the boy.' The future stands at a distance, waiting, but allowing them this respite.

I've gone on at great length but I still haven't managed to touch the mystery of what makes this quiet story so powerful; and I'm content to leave it that way. It's unspeakably beautiful, the artistry is extraordinary, the characterization is everything I could want, and the tragedy that underlies it gives it a haunting quality. Thank you so much for this story. I never imagined something so perfect.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 06:58 pm UTC (link)
"Bear with me," you say, as if this isn't the most amazing and flattering feedback I ever could have asked for.

I'm so glad you liked the story. I was dearly hoping, based on your prompts, that I was heading in the right direction (which just happens to be a very self-indulgent direction for me). I kind of love writing Easter egg stories where people so inclined can pick up hints here and there and make their own meaning.

It also delights me that he identifies Snape through his family resemblance to the sheep-breeding Princes.

Having roots in a small community myself, I've always liked the idea (which we miss out on a little in canon, as it's from Harry's POV) that wherever you go in the wizarding world, someone knows one of your relatives.

I love that Aberforth leaves him to it without a word, incurious and not presuming to jolly him out of it. And that he immediately seeks and finds confirmation of a bad omen.

I like to think that Aberforth is every bit as canny about people as his brother - but with a policy of non-interference, because when you interfere in people's lives, you end up responsible for whatever sticky end they inevitably come to.

This is one of the swiftest and best summings-up of Snape's accent change I've read. It's just right that this would be what spurs Aberforth to mockery, and it's even better that the mockery goes right over Snape's head; he really isn’t that experienced, certainly not in social niceties. His cleverness and social-climbing are weirdly naïve, which isn't at all the same thing as 'innocent.'

I've always been interested in how the Death Eaters really operated, and while I know there's a tendency to downplay Snape's culpability, I think 'naive' rather than 'innocent' is the perfect way to put it. I think Voldemort wanted followers, not a movement, and that a painfully class- and blood-conscious youth with anger and empathy issues would be easier to make use of than a legitimately suave evil genius. I like the idea of a young Snape who actually aspires to be worse than he is.

"One sloppy gobble and I'm yours for life. I've been pining away for you for a month, and now that it's past eleven and you look like a corpse, I plan to have my wicked way with you." Ahahaha, how could Snape not fall head over heels?

I maintain that young Snape might have turned out better with more sarcastic moderates as role modesl in his life.

The scene in which Snape takes refuge in the bath after the tragedy at Godric's Hollow is beautifully understated and heartwrenching. His overwhelming loneliness is terrible, and although Aberforth leaving him to his misery may be a kindness, the sense that he wouldn't interfere if the boy chose to kill himself is chilling. It suggests he knows Snape has done something worth killing himself for. Still, it's more respectful than Albus taking advantage of Snape's grief to manipulate him into service. (Excuse me while I sit here and grind my axe.)

Grind away. I think Aberforth knows a thing or two about not being able to live with yourself (and that the wrist he rubs against his hip just might be scarred) and is the sort of person to believe that making someone stay and suffer is, at worst, more cruel than letting them choose their end, and at best not something he's authorized to interfere with. This is obviously not the view of the author, but I think there's very little of Aberforth's life that doesn't exist in the shadow of what happened to his sister, or rather, in not knowing exactly what happened to her.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 06:59 pm UTC (link)
Snape, facing his first spring after Lily's death, has to learn to live with being alive, feeling life stir even against his will. And sexual release is as good a way as any of hiding an emotional breakdown.

Yes! This is my favourite thing about writing post-war fic. As romantic and tragic as it seems to mourn endlessly for a decade, the truth is that life goes on. And dealing with the return of normalcy - the biological intrusions of hunger and thirst and horniness - can be even harder than grieving.

Although I'd say Aberforth is just as capable; capable, for example, of breaking a rooster's neck to ritually distribute its blood. And I think he doth protest too much about the impossibility of hurting this boy. Defense mechanisms, perhaps.

I agree. I think if he were willing to admit that he's just as capable of letting Severus down as he was of failing Ariana, then the responsible thing to do - the thing in line with his moral code - would be to send Severus away. But maybe he doesn't want to do that; maybe here's where he starts to go a little too soft. Spring will do that to you.

The conversation about Snape helping to deliver a breech birth is fascinating, the perfect backstory touch. He's not squeamish or sentimental, and he works hard; he'd fit right into a farm where death is an accepted part of life.

There was actually originally a part that never ended up quite working - which was folded down into Aberforth's sheepdog observations - about whether Severus would have turned out better if he'd been raised a country boy, with that tangible connection to land and heritage and practical magic...

At any rate, I can't tell you how happy I am that you enjoyed this, or how much I enjoyed working with your wonderful prompts. I'm glad I had the chance to write this, and I will cherish your kind comments.

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[info]mywitch
2017-04-28 04:23 am UTC (link)
I have to say, reading your comments on this awesome story were nearly as interesting as the thing itself! Beautifully said - I concur!

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[info]perverse_idyll
2017-04-28 04:49 pm UTC (link)
I adore this story and I'm forever in awe of the artistry of it. It's pretty much perfect. And it's dear to me for other reasons - this is the last fest I participated in without defaulting, and my mother died right as the deadline was approaching. The fest gave me a focus, and writing gave me the emotional lifeline I needed, but I was the worst participant ever to burden the life of a mod (asking for extensions, swearing I would get it finished on time, begging for more extensions).

The person writing for me dropped out, so Delphi (who was modding and also learning an exhausting new job) stepped in and wrote a pinch hit at the last minute. It was like a gift from the gods. I couldn't have imagined a more beautiful story. It still give me shivers of pleasure.

Fandom is really wonderful sometimes, and the talent here never ceases to amaze me.

(Writing quickly from work, so I hope this is coherent.)

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[info]tarteaucitron
2014-05-07 10:50 pm UTC (link)
that has to be one of the most beautiful pieces of writing i've read in a very long time. the economy and rhythm of your writing and the lack of overt sentiment makes the emotional impact impossibly greater. it's heart-tugging, not just in the oblique references to snape's canon heartbreak, but also aberforth's complicated uncomplicated outlook (am i even making sense??) and insular bucolic manner of existence, at odds with the messy ending of the war, and his simple (if drily self-deprecating) acceptance of the sex that snape needs. i'm totally bowled over.

too much to quote, but i wanted to mention this:

He was a sheep dog, Aberforth decided. That was the way of families like the Princes. They turned out sheep farmers and sheep dogs: the stolid and the sharp. But someone had gone and raised the boy in a town, penned up indoors with too little to do. Small wonder he had become a worrier.

which is a stunningly brilliant piece of characterisation both of snape through the prism of aberforth's point of view and of aberforth by virtue of the pin-sharp voice and perspective.

just wow. you're amazing. i'm going for a lie down.

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[info]magnetic_pole
2014-05-07 11:33 pm UTC (link)
that has to be one of the most beautiful pieces of writing i've read in a very long time

My thoughts exactly. M.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:00 pm UTC (link)
I am so glad you enjoyed the story, and I'm hugely flattered by your kind comments.

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[info]magnetic_pole
2014-05-07 11:31 pm UTC (link)
What a gorgeous fic, Mystery Author. You do such a wonderful job letting the natural reticence of the characters bloom, echoing the uncertainty of the larger political situation. There are no narrative revelations, no moments of insight for the characters, no new knowledge gained as the two become more intimate. Small clues reveal themselves but never add up to something larger. Sex is a momentary relief in the face of painful incomprehension on both their parts. So powerful. M.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:08 pm UTC (link)
Thank you - I'm so glad you liked it.

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[info]magnetic_pole
2014-05-22 12:00 am UTC (link)
I truly did. Thanks, B. M.

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(Anonymous)
2014-05-08 08:48 am UTC (link)
I am not a great fan of Snape slash, but this was incredibly persuasive and moving. Thank you, Mystery Author! I've just recced you on One_Bad_Man over on LJ.
--Melodyssister

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:08 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much for the recommendation! I'm very glad you liked the story.

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[info]gingertart50
2014-05-08 09:54 am UTC (link)
This is wonderful! I love how you capture these two subtle, private and rather damaged characters, and I love the mood of the story, and how you have hinted at what we know about them from canon. A beautiful piece of writing.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:10 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much.

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[info]dandru
2014-05-08 03:47 pm UTC (link)
There was a certain expression shared by those who had never expected to find themselves here, in a room like this one, but this was the first time Aberforth had seen it on the face of somebody with boots that shabby. Brilliant detail!

They're both so cagey and world weary yet decidedly human. This is such an interesting take on Severus' experience during the first war. Really enjoyable read

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:10 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]teddy_radiator
2014-05-08 04:53 pm UTC (link)
He was a sheep dog, Aberforth decided. That was the way of families like the Princes. They turned out sheep farmers and sheep dogs: the stolid and the sharp. But someone had gone and raised the boy in a town, penned up indoors with too little to do. Small wonder he had become a worrier.

Perfect.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:10 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. :-)

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[info]lash_larue
2014-05-08 06:24 pm UTC (link)
Just damn...

He made no comment when the boy started shivering. He adjusted his grip, his hand moving steadily. His nose brushed the boy’s hair. His own excitement wasn’t much more than a trickle of heat. The hour was too late and his leg was paining him. But it felt good to hold onto someone.

When he was young, he said, as if he wasn't still soft-skinned and hardly able to grow a beard even after three days of idling in bed. Aberforth was old enough to want to smile at such a thing, and not enough of a knob to actually do it.

His arse was the only part of him with any meat to spare. Not even the thriftiest butcher could find a good chop on him, but he had enough to grab on to in back.


Some of my favorite lines. As a rule, I do not care overmuch for boyslash or crossgen.

This story is as close to perfect as anything I have ever read. I know of very few people whom I think are capable of producing something like this.

If you are not on this tiny list, you have a new fan.

I bow,
L

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:16 pm UTC (link)
I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you!

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[info]woldy
2014-05-08 08:12 pm UTC (link)
This is just gorgeous - Aberforth's language and observations, the languid pace of it, and wonderful observations about both of the characters. The emotions are understated, but the scenes are so wonderfully vivid that they paint beautiful pictures. Brava!

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:18 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much!

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[info]wwmrsweasleydo
2014-05-08 09:09 pm UTC (link)
I love the tone and the atmosphere of this: the way you build it through the writing. This is a great insight into two taciturn characters who don't discuss their emotions. I also loved all the farming details and knowledge of the countryside and nature. They really help to build the picture of Aberforth's character and lifestyle.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:18 pm UTC (link)
Thank you - I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]kelly_chambliss
2014-05-09 04:17 am UTC (link)
Just brilliant. Beautifully written, with each of the seasons presented so evocatively, their colors and scents blending with the changes in Aberforth and Severus's relationship to turn character and nature into an organic. seamless whole. That last image of honey-scented gold is just perfect. The wassail scene -- I could smell the oranges and ginger. I have so many favorite lines and moments, but I'll content myself with one: A few hands of All Fours and a round of Piquet took them through the cold hours and into the dawning of Christmas Day. This line sort of sums up the beauty of this fic: it captures the season, the two men's reticent characters (well, one boy and one man), and the poignant, sad tenderness of it it. Great story.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:21 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much - I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]therealsnape
2014-05-09 03:25 pm UTC (link)
What a beautifully-crafted story. There isn't an unnecessary word in it, and the characterization of both Aberforth and young Severus is brilliant.

There a so many great lines I couldn't possibly quote them all, but one of my favourites is Aberforth was old enough to want to smile at such a thing, and not enough of a knob to actually do it.. Sums up Aberforth's wisdom, as well as Young Severus.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:21 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much!

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[info]alisanne
2014-05-11 09:55 pm UTC (link)
Wow. I have to agree with those ahead of me who mentioned your gorgeously sparse writing, MA. Not a word is wasted here. Aberforth is so beautifully complicated and flawed, and Severus is well on his way to becoming his match.
These are some impressive writing chops!

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:21 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much!

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[info]torino10154
2014-05-14 05:01 pm UTC (link)
Wonderfully done. The writing is fabulous and I love your Aberforth. There are so many little details like the cutting of the apples and oranges and birthing the goat that paint such a rich picture. I must say I adored the sex--absolutely unsentimental but gloriously hot. Excellent work.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:21 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. :-)

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[info]mindabbles
2014-05-17 05:02 am UTC (link)
This is just brilliant. Your writing is gorgeous. I adore your characterizations--somehow sparse and rich at the same time. I love the pragmatism and need in the relationship and the spectre of Albus all through the story. Really, really well done!

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:25 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much. :-)

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[info]pauraque
2014-05-17 02:11 pm UTC (link)
This is beautifully written. The rich details of rural life come together to create this still and peaceful space, which it seems is just what Severus needs. There's something very farmerly about the way Aberforth lives -- pragmatic, hardworking, moving with the rhythms of life. Some years the lambs are stillborn, and some years they're healthy twins. It makes you feel that there are deeper, more solid things to life than the political machinations of wizards, which is an extraordinary thought to have when considering this time period. It's wonderful to think that Severus might have had moments like this in his too short, too sad life.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:31 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. That deeper, older 'magic' is exactly what I was going for - I've always loved the bits of canon that make the wizarding world seem bigger than the wars and older than the Victorians.

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[info]miss_morland
2014-05-18 10:51 pm UTC (link)
Augh. This is incredibly beautifully written, and if you are who I think you are, I can only say I think you've outdone yourself.

Like these lines from their initial meeting:

In what would prove to be the final days of the war, Aberforth’s brother entrusted to his keeping a hide-bound book, a stoppered silver phial the size of a finger bone, and a 21-year-old boy of uncertain provenance. This last turned up at the Hog’s Head on a morning in early August, and Aberforth, upon examining him, rendered the same judgment he had with the book and the phial. Didn’t look like much. Obviously valuable nonetheless. Most likely dangerous.

There was a certain expression shared by those who had never expected to find themselves here, in a room like this one, but this was the first time Aberforth had seen it on the face of somebody with boots that shabby.

His dark gaze fixed upon Aberforth as if he were measuring him up for a set of robes. Or maybe a coffin.


You have such a way with words, I'm in awe forever.

And stuff like Snape sharing something about his childhood while trying to make it impersonal and Aberforth knowing more about him/his family than Snape realises but not being a knob about it, and the comparison with the sheep dog, and the goats giving birth to healthy offspring for the first time in years, like a symbol of better times -- everything about this fic is so great. I really love it.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:34 pm UTC (link)
I am so glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you for the kind comments!

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[info]fluffyllama
2014-05-19 09:04 am UTC (link)
This is wonderful. I started out thinking how great it was to see Aberforth behaving like a wizard of his age, but it just became better and better as he just kept on living his life in his own simple way against the shadow of everything else going on.

Gorgeous.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:41 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much!

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[info]venturous
2014-05-19 10:53 pm UTC (link)
I love this pairing (drew them a few years ago: http://asylums.insanejournal.com/hp_beholder/51605.html)
and this story brings so much depth and dimension to their tale. I appreciate your deep observance of the simple turnings of Aberforth's world, you've made them rich and palpable.

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[info]broodedhelm
2014-05-20 07:46 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I remember that entry - very glad to be reminded of it!

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[info]mywitch
2017-04-28 04:21 am UTC (link)
Mind - blown.
What a gorgeously written story! I loved every moment. I wish I were a better writer myself so I could more fully express how wonderful this is and how much I enjoyed it. :D
Just amazing.

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