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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-04-08 01:11:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: the devil, round i, team ewe

Smile, You're on Camera -- Team EWE
Title: Smile, You’re on Camera
Team: Team EWE
Author: bewarethesmirk
Prompt: The Devil
Wordcount: ~14,000
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: A bit of Harry/Ginny but nothing serious or explicit.
Summary: Harry Potter has lost sight of what it means to listen to himself—he’s depressed and confused, moving through life only to please the Ministry and the press and his friends. One day he wakes up on a train next to Draco Malfoy and that all changes.
Author's Note Thank you so much to Team Sheep and all who betaed. Thanks to other people who helped when they didn’t even have a stake on this team.

Smile, You're on Camera

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Is the author/artist true to their team? Yes/No vote ("yes" is worth 2 points, "no" is worth 0)

How much did you like this story/art overall? 1 to 9 (1 being the least)

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	trubbleclef 2008-04-08 07:03 pm UTC (link)
	I thoroughly enjoyed this. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-28 07:39 am UTC (link)
	Always nice to hear. :) Thanks for reading! (Reply to this) (Parent)

ships_harry
2008-04-08 10:46 pm UTC (link)

Stalking turned job is pretty neat, as ideas go :). I enjoyed how lost Harry was; trying different things and having them not really help. It did seem like a bit of a quick jump from stalking to shagging, and I'm not sure the tattooed shop-owner entirely worked (bit distracting), but I thought the Harry/Ron/Hermione interactions and the Harry/Kreacher stuff was all great, plus Luna's entrance - that "Yes" made me laugh out loud. Good stuff!

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bewarethesmirk
2008-05-28 07:45 am UTC (link)

Thanks for reading. :D

It did seem like a bit of a quick jump from stalking to shagging, and I'm not sure the tattooed shop-owner entirely worked (bit distracting)...

I have to say I agree with you. I was writing this at the last minute and I wanted some quick way to resolve the fic.

I was reading a comment someone left to someone's HDC rec post, and they made the same point you did -- but it really got me thinking. If I were reading a fic where someone stalked Harry, I'd find it implausible that Harry would respond well at first. There's not enough build-up. So, I think I'm going to edit and write more. I've got scenes I like (the Kreacher and Luna interactions, for ex.) to work but there are definitely things to change.

Hopefully, if I re-post an edited version with a sequel of sorts you'll be around to read it. *g*

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greenjuly
2008-04-09 06:16 am UTC (link)

I like humour in fics, but this one felt like a bit of a strange blend to me. I feel like it might have been better either to play up the fashionplate!Harry angle and make it more overtly cracky, or play it straight, but write it slightly differently.
I guess the thing is that for me it didn’t feel like there was enough buildup to the sex/romance, it seemed rather fast and without precedent. I wasn't able to feel invested in it. Harry immediately jumping to the (correct) conclusion that Malfoy had fallen in love with him also struck me as unlikely. I don’t mean to offend, this is just my opinion ... I favour a more canon-y Draco than what you’ve written here.

The supporting case (Hermione, Ron, Kreacher) were fun! And Luna’s entrance : brilliant! Best moment in the story.

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	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-28 07:47 am UTC (link)
	Thank you for your thoughtful responses. I'm not at all offended -- I agree completely! It's why I've decided to edit and rewrite parts, then quite possibly add a lot to this fic. I'm a firm believer in canon!Draco and in making the move to H/D as a relationship, or sex, or whatever...believable. I appreciate your insight! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	greenjuly 2008-05-28 05:10 pm UTC (link)
	Hey, it was nice of you to respond. I'm glad you weren't offended. Good luck with the rewrite! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-28 05:29 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks. :D I've got a ton of comments to reply to on LJ. I never know how to respond to comments -- I feel like I'm being redundant! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	greenjuly 2008-05-29 03:20 pm UTC (link)
	No, it just shows you're courteous, if that still exists on the internet. =) (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-29 05:51 pm UTC (link)
	...if that still exists on the internet. =) ~~Or in fandom~~ Maybe I'm courteous on the internet and not in RL. Hee. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	greenjuly 2008-05-29 07:29 pm UTC (link)
	Sometimes it seems like fandom is built on the shaky twin pillars of wank and snark. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-29 07:39 pm UTC (link)
	I like the snark. Sometimes. And wanking of the sexual variety but that's not what we're discussing. ;-) (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	greenjuly 2008-05-29 08:32 pm UTC (link)
	I do like a healthy dose of snark. But sometimes fandom just scares me. (Reply to this) (Parent)