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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-04-08 01:11:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: the devil, round i, team epilogue

Better The Devil You Know (Mehen) -- Team Epilogue
Title: Better The Devil You Know (Mehen)
Team: Epilogue
Author: chaeldub
Prompt: The Devil
Wordcount: ~14,800
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Infidelity, misuse of magic, self-harm(inflicted by another), angst, mentions of character death.
Summary: Any chain is freely worn. You are enslaved only because you allow it. Throught the passing of time, Harry comes to realise we are each our own Devil.
Author's Note The meaning of The Devil card can be found Here Thank you to my teammates and to my betas W&W—I could not have done it without you.

Better The Devil You Know (Mehen)

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greenjuly
2008-04-09 02:43 am UTC (link)

I hope you don’t mind concrit. While your writing is far from bad, to me this story is not all that successful. I didn’t really buy the dynamic between Draco and Harry – I don’t think it was built up enough, or given enough depth. Although there were some really neat bits and a lot of potential in your story, for me this is a classic example of a story that could used more extensive editing and betaing.

Plus lines like this :

It was like the scar on his head, on his psyche and on his soul.

This dark part of the wizarding world, this little black blotch on the Wizarding map, still took in its brethren, tucking them into the shadows like the folds of a skirt hiding frightened children.

veer too close to melodrama for my taste.

Though You dress to the right cracked me up.

Also, are Sirius’ tattoos canon? I always thought that was a movieverse thing. Not that I mind if you did borrow that from movie!Sirius.

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	melfinatheblue 2008-04-09 01:24 pm UTC (link)
	The highs, the lows, the emotion in this fic! Oh, very well done, indeed. (Reply to this)

	pirateninjax.livejournal.com 2008-04-23 02:27 am UTC (link)
	I really enjoyed the tattoo idea. Feel sort of bad for Ginny and all them who most definitely just found out hard core what's going on between Harry and Draco but eh. They'll live. Although Ron may have mental scarring for the rest of his life ^^ (Reply to this)