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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-04-03 07:15:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: judgment, round i, team ewe

After Eden -- Team EWE
Title: After Eden
Team: EWE
Author: rickey_a
Prompt: Judgment
Word Count: ~15,000
Rating: NC-17
Warning(s): None
Summary: Life threatening injuries are an occupational hazard even for a seasoned Auror, but Harry Potter never considered the possibility of life altering injury. And why is it that Draco Malfoy has to be the one to help him?
Author's Notes: Huge thanks to my betas (to be revealed), the unsung heroes of fan fiction, and my marvelous EWE teammates.

After Eden

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	tlp2107 2008-04-03 05:01 pm UTC (link)
	this was really wonderful! i really liked the progression of their relationship. there was great banter between them, and they were completely adorable by the end (not to mention hot). and i loved ron's third rule! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:18 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks so much for your comments. I'm pretty proud of how this turned out. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	trubbleclef 2008-04-03 06:41 pm UTC (link)
	Very well done! :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:19 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks babe:) (I thought folks would spot this as me from 30,000 ft - giggles that I remained anon) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ineffabili_tea 2008-04-04 01:17 am UTC (link)
	Ooh, that was fabulous! I really loved how the smut tied into how Draco had been helping Harry - very clever! And Ron's rules were great. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:20 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks so much. I'm a big Ron fan and love to give him the good lines, especially in an H/D fic;) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	irana 2008-04-05 05:42 am UTC (link)
	So very well done. Ron's rules, Draco's attitude, Harry's obliviousness - willful at that - just brill stuff. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:20 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you. I really appreciate the comments:) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ships_harry 2008-04-05 10:53 pm UTC (link)
	I really like stories where characters have lasting injury or damage - I enjoyed the rehab and the details of how things would have to change for Harry. Great stuff :). (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:21 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks heaps. This was an interesting challenge to write. (Reply to this) (Parent)

greenjuly
2008-04-06 10:16 pm UTC (link)

I likes me a magical injury story! I liked the premise of this fic, because it’s totally believable that Harry would undergo some kind of accident in his line of work. Draco here is quite far removed from his canon-self, but this works given that the fic is set when they’re 30ish. I like the way you have written him and dealt with the events of the past; it works really well.

I like confirmedgay!Harry, too, even if I did kind of hate the line "So how's my favorite homosexual ex-boyfriend today?" But I do appreciate its utility in getting a bunch of backstory out of the way.

I loved the eventual tension that developed between Harry and Draco :

Suddenly, Harry felt awkward and unsure, much like his first days at Hogwarts. There was something strange and unsaid between them, only Harry hadn't the faintest idea what it might be. Certainly, they had overcome many of their differences and much of their past.

"Well good night then," said Harry, grabbing a handful of Floo powder.

Ah, yes. The awkward end of a ‘non-date date’! You captured that feeling very well. And Harry’s attempt to make a joke about the newspaper article! I adore scenes like that.

The (first) dinner scene was priceless. Eating crow, indeed. As Bill and Ted would say, that part was so righteous. Oh, and it was neat that Dean and Seamus made an appearance! I’ve always had a soft spot for those characters. And Ron’s rules! Too brilliant.

Props to your betas, too. This story is well-edited and considered. I really enjoyed this.

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	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:22 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks for your comments. And yeah, I knew the Ginny line was going to be love/hate. I loved it and later showed their relationship as close, honest and playful, so I left it in;) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	taylorexpansion 2008-04-07 02:14 am UTC (link)
	Lovely! What a feel-good story. Everything was so clearly pictured -- I had no trouble seeing the characters in my mind (their facial expressions, everything). The progression of Harry and Draco's relationship and courtship felt so credible. This was such a pleasure -- thank you! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:22 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks so much:) (Reply to this) (Parent)

kaleecat
2008-04-07 11:35 pm UTC (link)

An engaging and quite credible story from start to finish. I was especially touched by the auction/Hogwarts painting aspect of the story--that Draco so clearly understood Harry's wistfulness for the only true home Harry ever had.

The development of their relationship flows very well, and feels extremely in character. True to each man's place in the world. I so enjoyed Harry treating Draco & shoving prejudices in others' faces.

I enjoyed this story a lot.

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	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:23 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you very much. It's great to hear when folks think a story "works". (Reply to this) (Parent)

	lalaith_niniel 2008-04-08 08:15 am UTC (link)
	This was absolutely wonderful! The flow of Harry and Draco's relationship was so believable, from the hostility to the understanding they each had of the other. The little details in this make it especially wonderful: the pangram that Draco created, the magical devices to help Harry along, Dean's painting. Everything in this was so well thought out. Great job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:24 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks buckets. The pangram was fun and actually the very first thing I wrote for this story. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	pirateninjax.livejournal.com 2008-04-25 05:08 am UTC (link)
	This was definitely the best relationship progression between the two that I think I have ever read. Simply wonderful. Slow but there through all of Harry's frustrations. Draco was so patient.. kind of. ^^ I love Ron's reaction and his rules. Completely fabulous. I actually clapped over the fact that the ex 'moved' giggle FANTASTIC job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-05-27 08:25 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks so much. Ron is a rock and I think he often gets misused in H/D fics. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	galad222000 2008-06-08 04:47 am UTC (link)
	Wonderful, heartwarming story. Loved it. CB (Reply to this) (Thread)

	rickey_a 2008-06-08 11:24 pm UTC (link)
	thanks for reading and your nice comment:) (Reply to this) (Parent)