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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-05-08 08:11:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: temperance, round i, team fanon

Caught Between the Windows and the World - Team Fanon
Title: Caught Between the Windows and the World.
Team: Team Fanon
Author: jamie2109
Prompt: Temperance
Wordcount: 16,950
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Light BDSM
Summary: His hour was rapidly becoming a cherished time of day and Draco felt free to think things he'd never imagined before. These things became a promise, a wish, and a desire.
Author's Note: Thanks to my betas A and A. Based on this meaning of the card focusing on the blending of opposites and tempering a stronger bond together than apart.

Caught Between the Windows and the World.

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	ships_harry 2008-05-08 04:02 pm UTC (link)
	Good story :). I feel like I need to explain that my slightly lacklustre reaction is more due to having a dislike for structured, formalised BDSM than to anything in particular about what you've written - it's one of the few things I always put down as a "please don't" for fest sign-ups. But I read your story, and enjoyed a lot about it regardless :). (Reply to this)

lilithilien
2008-05-08 06:21 pm UTC (link)

There was so much I liked about this story. Describing Draco's needs the way you did and having Guardian as his release made a lot of sense. At the same time, there was the building relationship with Harry that, as it grew separately, felt very realistic and separate. That's why I was disappointed that the ending felt too cliched, with Guardian = Harry, and Draco just accepting that without even a hint at anger for being lied to for so long. I guess it fits for the "fanon" category, just ... as a story it lost some of its credibility there, which is a shame because otherwise I quite liked how you handled the BDSM component.

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	oconel 2008-05-11 05:20 am UTC (link)
	I loved the interactions between Draco and Guardian, but I was a bit disappointed to find out that Harry was Guardian. You made a wonderful description about why Draco needs to go to Guardian (and of his problems too!). (Reply to this)

	leela_cat 2008-05-15 08:47 pm UTC (link)
	very nicely done. I was happy with Guardian's identity. Draco so totally didn't need the additional angst and anxiety of Guardian being someone else. Thank you. (Reply to this)

viridescence
2008-05-15 10:56 pm UTC (link)

Ahahahah! I totally wondered at Draco's first encounter with Guardian if Harry was Guardian. And I talked myself out of it. And then it kept popping into my head as I read, that I thought Harry could be Guardian. He knew Draco so very well--he knew what was going on in Draco's head better than I would have expected of an anonymous Muggle that Draco hadn't ever met before. But then I thought that maybe it could be a ruse, or that Guardian really was an anonymous Muggle who was simply very intuitive. So I was really pleased to see that my gut instinct was correct all along.

I really enjoyed this story. I am not a fan of S/M (I have never been one to enjoy inflicting or receiving pain, nor have I been one to need physical pain to deal with emotional pain), though I can read it if it's well done. Same with Dom/sub. And this was well done, on both counts. For me, the emotional intimacy is more important than the S/M, but you've shown very well how S/M can be just as (or more) emotionally intimate as non-s/M interactions due to the raw vulnerability. In many ways, BDSM creates an honesty that might not otherwise be present.

I enjoyed Draco's journey in this story. How he matured, how his perspective of Harry changed as he opened his mind to the possibility that his original opinions of Harry might not be accurate. His developing crush, and how he used Guardian to deal with his feelings about Harry, which is so ironic. I loved that he wasn't angry with Harry, and the fact that they both found what they need with each other. Draco doesn't have to give up Guardian now. :D

Well done.

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