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@ 2008-05-06 08:11:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: the chariot, round i, team epilogue

Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction) - Team Epilogue
Title: Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction)
Team: Team Epilogue
Author: klynie1
Prompt: The Chariot
Wordcount: About 18,400
Rating: NC-17-lite
Warnings: Infidelity (but in an open marriage, which should probably be another warning, I suppose), Open marriage (see?), Cheating (for readers who are hopelessly honest), A Very Tiny Bit of girl-kissing-girl action
Summary: A Romance, In Diverse Parts, Involving Champions, Cheating and Chariots in Various and Sundry Combinations.
Author's Note: A literal translation of my card, as a tribute to the Chariot many ride: the London Underground. Hugs and love to Team Epilogue. Any mistakes you notice are my own.
Disclaimer: Harry Potter, Draco Malfoy and all associated characters from the Harry Potter universe are the property of J.K. Rowling and those to whom she has licensed her creations, including without limitation Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books, Raincoat Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No copyright infringement is intended. The author is making no profit from this story.

Love in a London Tube Stop (Under Construction)

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lilithilien
2008-05-06 09:03 pm UTC (link)

Whee! This story was such a fast-paced ride from start to finish. I *adored* what you did with Scorpius and Albus, putting them in opposite houses and having them as this wonderful amalgamation of the best parts of each. Returning to Madam Puddifoot's with Draco was hilarious. Vangelis cheering for Chariots of Fire had me rolling. And Draco's rules and the dialogue/rationalisations for him to bend them were wonderfully clever. Can you tell I'm crazy about this story?!

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	Love in a London Tube Stop klynie1 2008-06-08 02:06 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you so much! I had a lot of fun with this story, particularly Albus and Scorpius. I knew it was totally over the top, but I couldn't resist putting making Vangelis a character so that I could play with the Chariots of Fire reference. g (Reply to this) (Parent)

meredyth_13
2008-05-07 06:31 am UTC (link)

It took me a little bit to get the feel of this story - it's slight crackiness sneaked in and I wasn't sure how far it was going, but then I got into the groove and just rocked along having the most wonderful time.

Draco's somewhat manic, hyper-protective, edgy snark was delightful. Poor Harry, with his lousy wife and kink induced impotence was almost pitiable, except he really did want to work out his life. Yaye for Malfoy pointing cock!compass leading him back in the right direction.

Al and Scorpius were truly adorable - and a lovely, crafty, quirky backdrop to Harry and Draco's perambulations. I could see real shades of Marauders style cunning and creativity there - something that was sadly missing from Harry's canon role and most fanfic.

And a great resolution - what a fantastic negotiation and outcome! Really enjoyed this work. :D

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	Love in a London Tube Stop klynie1 2008-06-08 02:10 pm UTC (link)
	I'm glad that you enjoyed the story - thank you! This was my first foray into real crack and I had so much fun with it. I love that Al and Scorpius reminded you of the Marauders, since I had them in mind while I was writing the boys. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	hptwilight429 2008-05-10 10:51 pm UTC (link)
	I seriously loved this. Draco and Harry were fantastic, but I think my favorite was Albus. He truly is a Slytherin. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Love in a London Tube Stop klynie1 2008-06-08 02:13 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you! Al was my favorite, too, even though I loved them all. g (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ships_harry 2008-05-13 02:27 am UTC (link)
	Argh, so good! Loved the boys, loved the men - Draco's parental panic was pretty awesome, and the scheming little buggers that were Albus and Scorpius? Pure win :D. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Love in a London Tube Stop klynie1 2008-06-08 02:18 pm UTC (link)
	Lol! Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I took the four of them down the crack highway, but they gave me a heck of a good ride along the way. (Reply to this) (Parent)

shyfoxling
2008-05-14 04:03 am UTC (link)

I like the device of the Triwizard Tournament! Oldie but a goodie. Too bad we don't get a Yule Ball! :)

Astoria/Asteria -- lol. Nice dodge.

I'm giggling at just about everything Draco is saying. He's just in top sarcastic form, eh? And/or just being scorching hot, at least where Harry is concerned. :)

I'm thrilled with the characterization and dialogue here. I can't say enough about it, so I guess I won't try. And dude, that nursery rhyme ("Wizards made them, Muggles paid them") is made of win.

"...Oh, God," he moaned as his son ran a muddy hand through his hair, "not the hair, Scorpius! Treasure it while you have it!"

LOL!

"The same thing as you, Papa," Scorpius said quietly, his bravado gone. "I would have been honoured to have been placed in Slytherin, but I could do more good in Gryffindor. People need to know that Malfoys aren't evil."

This is really very subtle. It's a good interweaving of Gryffindor - thinks it wants to be Slytherin - is really Gryffindor thing... while not doing any dishonour to Slytherin.

a Draco that was nipping and sucking and ohGodrubbinghisballsjustrightandpressingwiththeheelofhishandrightthere

MMmmyyyuurrghaaah*eyeroll*---

yeah. Yum.

"Were you like this with Astoria?"

"Asteria. Of course. Although I allowed her to kiss me, as she was my wife."

"No wonder she left you."

lol -- you go, Harry!

"The key is what Scorpius thinks. Does he think he's a prize? And if so, does he think I'm in the race?" Al smiled, a wide, hopeful, excited boy-in-love grin. "Thanks, Dad!" He stood.

"For what?" As Al continued to the door without answering, Harry called out. "Where are you going?"

"I've got a race to run," Al said, his smile incandescent.

Ummm.. I think I missed something. lol.

And... mm. Ahh. Straightforward Harry who gives in and says "Draco, I want to love you" ahhh, yesss. :D

"Would you cheat with me?"

"In a second."

"Right. I've thought about it. I'll change the rules."

"Then I'll cheat."

Aaaaiiieee *applauds*

Draco wrapped his arm over Harry's chest and began a gentle rocking motion with his hips. [...] It seemed like Draco's soft thrusts would continue forever, but eventually he pressed tight and came inside Harry with a soft exhalation of breath against Harry's neck.

Mmmmm. Yum. *lies back and enjoys* Lovely, languid.

So yay, and yay again. And did I mention yay?

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	Love in a London Tube Stop klynie1 2008-06-08 02:25 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you so much for your comments! I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. I had a good time with the Triwizard Tournament, though I'm sorry that I didn't have a Yule Ball for you. That would have offered so many nice romantic opportunities, too... (Reply to this) (Parent)