Oh...oh my. That was beautiful. Perfectly written, and the fact that Zack and Cloud were so mixed up in mind and body and situation in the dream, and oh...
Quick thing: Cloud bounced over, taking the opening and running with it. <-- That's in your Zack section. *grin*
The last line about seeing Zack in Cloud's eyes, and the sky, were perfect. I too have only seen the Japanese version with translations, so...yeah. Lovely. ♥