K, I promised I'd come back when I was more coherent. *grins* So, where to start?
Well, I absolutely love that you used all five of my boys. Really, nothing could have made this more perfect... except, you know, seeing Bill and Severus play. *drool* So... lines.
"If I can endure Weasley for you, then you can certainly allow me the same courtesy for Longbottom." Because of course Draco doesn't really want Bill's body. *rolls eyes*
Black kohl lined Bill's eyes, turning their shape more almond, and the green shadow brought out the bright blue of his iris. Ochre coloured his lips and lightly stained his cheeks, giving him a healthful glow that matched his henna-enhanced hair. And here begin the turning of Irana into mush.
Writhing and wriggling as if there were no one else around and watching, Longbottom danced just for Weasley. Longbottom had filled in well, growing out of his baby fat and into the strong, capable wizard before them. Quiet power radiated off of Longbottom, and Severus could see why Draco was attracted to him. YEEEESSS!!!! Because goddamnit, THAT'S Neville!
Okay, so the entire paragraph this line comes from was hella hot and had me whimpering, but really, this? As Harry stepped out of the legs, Neville quickly and neatly folded the trousers then placed a lingering kiss to the top of Harry's prick. Fuck. Yes.
"Perhaps another time... when I can devote my full attention to you alone," Severus purred. *whimpers and mewls* Yes, please? Pretty please?
And I'm stopping there because really? I can't even decide what bits I like most after that. Would be pointless to quote the entire damn thing.