Yay for plot!! I'm wondering whether the Avalanche members are the ones we know from the game - since Nibelheim survived, Tifa wouldn't be involved, and I don't think Corel is gone, is it? In which case Barret wouldn't be in either. Maybe that's why they seem to be so competent... XD
Even though the Cloud/Tifa relationship didn't go the way I hoped it would... that talk really does make up for it. XDD But I still don't really understand why Cloud invited Zack to the bar - was it to go talk to Tifa?
I'd love to know what was rewritten in the chapter, and what was your original intention/plotline someday.