This is awesome, especially for your first challenge! I don't think there is anything to criticise; it was all great.
Love the outdoors/daytime being incorporated, made for an even hotter read.
Can't wait to read more from you.
~Victoria~
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britin_forever (britin_forever) wrote in bj_action on September 23rd, 2007 at 04:15 pm
Wonderful :-)