Wonderful rewriting of canon! I was thrilled with the changes you made and the positive effects they had on Severus and Harry. Their openly fond, (mostly) calm, and very close relationship was beautifully depicted, and I loved the scene where they became lovers with such breathtaking ease and gentleness. *happy sigh* Another favourite scene of mine was Nagini’s death, which happened in a most satisfying way. Also, Severus’ bleary thoughts of Harry and star-watching were so endearing.
“What’s become of Lily’s child?”
I loved that Severus asked about Harry. And of course he would ask your Dumbledore. I liked the other characters too, especially Draco. He knew just how to provoke Harry (not that Harry didn’t know how to retaliate), and it was intriguing to see him in the role of a spy.