Who's Pistol Larry?
I love when letters are included in fic, and epistolary fic in general, and this was really well done. It can be hard to get a whole story across within the limited framework of letters, but you did a great job with this one. I laughed out loud at the very first post-script, and the idea of Harry gouging at the bottoms of the chocolates. I like how you worked in little details like the beard and the smoking, and how you got the info out about where Snape was living through the food, at first. (And as much as I laughed at the post-script, I have to to admit the puns were pretty cringe-worthy -- tho Love Me Tandoor still makes me laugh.) I liked the way the letters showed their relationship growing. One thing that's really impressive is how hot and sensual the descriptions of the sex were -- even tho it wasn't being described as it was happening, but as fantasies or memories. You've got two lovely character voices, but your own writing voice comes thru as well. That last letter was just a perfect ending. Really well done!