Truly one smart tokala!
What a darling story! You put new spin on a host of classic cliches, and the fic is great, with one of the best, cute, sudden surprise endings I've seen.
I love bumbling Harry - triple loops in the air, but on the ground he's crashing into Snape right and left. Hee! I have to suspect that Snape engineered a few of those. It's just the sort of geekish thing he'd do, staging collisions to try to turn them into introductions. Complete with his not-so subtle comments on how Harry's molesting his body! Too, too funny.
Good thing for their sakes that Lucius decides to meddle. The tokala is a brilliant invention, and his surprising changes of plan - and himself -at the end are quite beautifully told. Two love stories instead of one, so wonderful! And Lucius lets him get away with the change of plans. Lovely, lovely schmoopy, a delightful read!