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snarrymod ([info]snarrymod) wrote in [info]snarry_games,
@ 2009-06-27 22:50:00

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Entry tags:free for all, opening games

OPENING GAMES FREE-FOR-ALL CHALLENGE No. 9 from Paperbacked!
Our next Free For All Challenger decided to do a ficlet in verse! We are very pleased to
present [info]paperbacked!



Title: A Living Hour
Author/Artist: [info]paperbacked
Thing/Place/Action: paper/shore/singing
Drabble/Drawble/Ficlet/Limerick?: Ficlet-ish! 115 words.
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: U – warning for angsty sonnet, though.
Notes/Disclaimers/Betas I genuinely intended to write a smutty version of 'The Raven', and indeed got halfway through writing one, but it was so unimaginably, poke-your-eyes-out-with-a-spoon horrible, I wrote this instead. It's supposed to be a sonnet about Snape by Harry. Apologies to Elizabeth Bishop, John Donne and Shakespeare, respectively.







A Living Hour



The same to you are dusky skies and grey,

They hold no function now, no consequence.

Like shores that ebb and flow, your peerless day

Was swift to pass, long in remembrance.

To know you was to know oneself; like lines

Etched on the tattered paper of the heart

You leapt and sang; yet every muse declines

Wearied by battle, age and selfish art.

I loved you fiercely, angrily, with love

That gentled your caress, filled it with grace

And made we two a world and world enough

For two, a love that lives. Although your face

Is lost to death, the sharpest gall can't sour

The time we loved and lost; a living hour.






Thank you, [info]paperbacked!!

Stay tuned for more Free For All!

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[info]aeryun
2009-06-28 01:53 am UTC (link)
I don't think you need to appologise at all. I think this is beautiful. And I normally really don't like this sort of thing. Thank you for sharing with us!

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[info]paperbacked
2009-07-01 08:31 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! I'm very glad that you enjoyed it :)

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[info]joanwilder
2009-06-28 02:02 am UTC (link)
Beautiful imagery. Beautifully written. I know how hard it is to do this well, and you certainly did it. Elizabeth, John and Will would give you a two thumbs up!

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[info]gingertart50
2009-06-28 03:09 am UTC (link)
Glorious! That is beautiful and made me cry. I loved it.

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[info]fancypantsdylan
2009-06-28 04:02 am UTC (link)
That was really beautiful and heartfelt, no need to apologise

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[info]snapessecret
2009-06-28 05:18 am UTC (link)
Just beautiful. Love it♥

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[info]szefi
2009-06-28 07:12 am UTC (link)
*sniffs* Beautiful.

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[info]awrence
2009-06-28 08:07 am UTC (link)
Oh but to be loved or to love as this. Your work is truly magical. Thank you.

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[info]bk7brokemybrain
2009-06-28 09:28 am UTC (link)
"Like shores that ebb and flow, your peerless day

Was swift to pass, long in remembrance."

That perfectly sums up Snape's role and life. This was gentle and gorgeous! I could understand exactly what you wanted to say. Really beautiful, terribly sad.

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[info]secretsolitaire
2009-06-28 09:41 am UTC (link)
*sniffle* That's really lovely. :-(

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[info]amanitamuscaria
2009-06-28 12:01 pm UTC (link)
Just beautiful.

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[info]alisanne
2009-06-29 03:24 pm UTC (link)
*sniff*
Really beautiful. ♥

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[info]venturous
2009-06-29 10:25 pm UTC (link)
I think your august muses would be pleased. This was lovely.

I love the weather in the opening lines, it sets the mood. and "tattered paper of the heart" is just beautiful. Love this line, too, it's classic:
"And made we two a world and world enough"

thank you

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[info]elvirablue
2009-06-30 12:35 pm UTC (link)
That’s a lovely, engaging poem. My favourite part:

I loved you fiercely, angrily, with love
That gentled your caress, filled it with grace
And made we two a world and world enough

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[info]unbroken_halo
2009-07-02 07:59 am UTC (link)
Lovely!

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[info]mia_ugly
2009-07-03 07:29 am UTC (link)
My heart, she is broken.

So beautiful.

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[info]torino10154
2009-07-05 03:36 pm UTC (link)
Truly breathtaking. Exquisite work.

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[info]anya_elizabeth
2009-07-16 05:47 pm UTC (link)
I bow down in awe to anyone who can write decent poetry. Very beautiful. *sniffles*

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[info]centaury_squill
2009-07-29 05:38 pm UTC (link)
Really touching. Thank you.

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