Tweak

InsaneJournal

Tweak says, "We're not lost, Private, we're"

snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-05-19 21:16:00

Entry tags:

entry, team dragon, who_la_hoop

TEAM DRAGON ENTRY: Who_La_Hoop "The Sleeping Prince"
Title: The Sleeping Prince
Author: who_la_hoop *See the Author's Master List of Fics HERE: Archive
Team: Team Dragon, roar! :D
Genre(s): Postwar
Prompt(s): Portrait, Inheritance
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: Mild R; *swearing, sexual innuendo*
Word Count: ~41,600
Summary: It's hard to ignore your past — and impossible to do so when you can't remember your future. But a meddlesome portrait, a dragon with an ancient grudge and true love's kiss teach an unlikely Prince that a regrettable past doesn't have to mean an unhappy ending.
A/N: Huge thanks to my betas — Lyv, Ina, Klynie and Centaury — for all their help, and yay for the mods for running the Games!

"The Sleeping Prince by Who La Hoop"

Don't forget to review!

Mod note: POLLS ARE NOW CLOSED. THANK YOU FOR PARTICIPATING IN THE SNARRY GAMES.

Mod note: If you rec this story, please link to this POST, not the story itself, or the author/team will not get their proper vote tally or feedback. Thank you.

Page 1 of 5
<<	[1] [2] [3] [4] [5]	>>

(Post a new comment)

	slashpine 2008-05-20 07:04 am UTC (link)
	What a fine, fun story. Not just romance and suspense, but so much fun with other characters - especially Ron and the hapless Professor Smith! Hermione and McGonagall are wonderfully evident as well. And the two dragons, one full-sized, one tiny, are amusing tokens of your team. What a welcome, well-crafted story this is! I'm definitely going to be re-reading it. (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:05 pm UTC

	faynia 2008-05-20 07:18 am UTC (link)
	GLEE! JUST GLEE! I don't even know if you know how happy all your fics make me XD And the fact that you went with my second favorite fandom trope makes me want to take you and snog you cross-eyed. De-aged!Snape ftw! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:06 pm UTC

faynia, 2008-05-21 05:23 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:30 pm UTC

whimseywisp, 2008-06-04 05:49 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-06-06 02:43 pm UTC

mac_tunes
2008-05-20 07:52 am UTC (link)

*mixed feelings*

First off, I would like to say that I love this story quite well. However, I feel like soemthing is missing. Maybe I should not have been reading this one when I don't feel well. Everytime I read a certain part of the story, I thought that it would be going that way, but you wrote it diferently from what I thought. Should this story be "choose your path", I might already be dead early in the story. :p Thanks for an entertaining story.

Nothing against you really, but I feel a little let down towards the end, like it was a rushed off to finish the story quick. I hope you don't take this to heard.

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:07 pm UTC

mac_tunes, 2008-05-21 05:20 pm UTC

themadscriptor
2008-05-20 08:16 am UTC (link)

oh, this was marvelous! i loved your characterisations -- awkward de-aged snape, sycophantic professor smith, earnestly fumbling harry. ron and hermione also pleased me very much because they so often get sidelined (not so here). all in all a lovely romance, and i thought you captured the half-terror, half-exhilaration of the relationship nicely. thanks for a great read. :)

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:08 pm UTC

	bewarethesmirk 2008-05-20 08:59 am UTC (link)
	i haven't even read it yet, but i saw it and started squeeing. :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:09 pm UTC

	svartalfur 2008-05-20 09:11 am UTC (link)
	A very entertaining read. I especially enjoyed the awkward boy love. (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:10 pm UTC

gaycrow
2008-05-20 09:57 am UTC (link)

I really enjoyed this.

I liked the way you had Snape changing back from his teenage self after the flask had broken, and that Harry needed to get to like him in his "old" form, rather than just continuing to like him as teenage!Snape.

The first Defence lesson was brilliant. The way Harry managed to bind Snape, but then was unable to say that he hated him - that was very well done.

One of the best things about the story to me was the way you captured Ron's dialogue. I could really hear movie!Ron saying all those things. You've written a very convincing Hermione as well. I liked all their scenes together a great deal. At the same time, I loved the way you had Harry being so hesitant, and tongue-tied, and struggling to cope with his growing feelings for Snape. I think you wrote all of that amazingly well.

I also loved the comparison between teenager Snape's and grown up Snape's kissing technique. Lucky Harry that he got to experience both!

Altogether a pleasure to read - I was sorry to get to the end, I wanted it to keep going! ♥

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:14 pm UTC

	aliciajd 2008-05-20 12:01 pm UTC (link)
	Every single person in perfect character ... are you sure you aren't JKR in disguise? Absolutely, wonderful! Thank you. (Reply to this) (Thread)

gaycrow, 2008-05-20 09:25 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:16 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:15 pm UTC

littleblackbow
2008-05-20 01:25 pm UTC (link)

I.

Loved.

This.

Story.

Okay, before I totally gush all over the place here, let me point out a few things that struck me as being just incredibly amazing.

First off, the pacing of it was elegant. You have the perfect build-up, and then this lovely climax when Snape has his breakdown, and then a major climax when Harry saves Snape.

Snape buying him the dragon as a way of showing just how far Snape had fallen was brilliant. And then there was the fact that older snape with his memories was the same bastard as always...

It was just awesome. I do somewhat agree with the above comment about the ending being a little abrupt, but I think it's alright. I mean, after thinking about it, the reason I wanted the ending to be drawn out was 'cause I wanted more story - not so much that it needed more at the end.

You've really created a wonderful piece of fiction here, and it's one that I'll come back to read again and again, I'm sure.

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:20 pm UTC

emmessann
2008-05-20 01:48 pm UTC (link)

I adored this! It satisfied a lot of fanfic itches I didn't realize I had.

1) that young Snape, however much you love him, would be rah-ther a trial to deal with. I loved the way he imprinted on Draco for a while.

2) In umpty-thousand fanfics over the last few years, I don't remember anyone going so deeply into JKR's internal Harry-voice so well and sustaining it for an entire long story like this. The way he tries to reason things out, the way he reacts to people -- it's pitch-perfect. I LOVE the DADA duel -- it's exactly right for the next step after Harry's smart remarks in HBP.

3) I love that you made Snape old again! My heart broke for him when it happened, but this way is better. The thing with most de-aged Snape fics, and I love several of them, is that the Snape who gets rewarded in them isn't *our* Snape. To see the prickly bastard grope HIS way to a happy ending without sacrificing his essential character was really fulfilling.

The only thing I might have wished for is a little more acknowledgment of the grief everyone in the school must be experiencing (a casual mention of Crabbe and Goyle brought me up short.) But then, that wouldn't really have fit the tone of this story, which fits beautifully with everything else in the series rather than the angst of the end of DH.

Thanks so much for the great read!

(Reply to this) (Thread)

(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2008-05-20 11:15 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:32 pm UTC

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:31 pm UTC

ashenv
2008-05-20 02:03 pm UTC (link)

I am in love with this story, I absolutely loved it! If I could give you 100s across the board I would. Admittedly I am a total dunderhead as our dear Sevvie would say when it comes to leaving comments but let me at least attempt to be coherent.

The beginning was marvelous, so typical Harry, Hermy and Ron that I squeed with glee over how perfect you got them. It was just like something they would do, and of course it had to go wrong in some way, and of course Albus has to be involved in it somehow! So typically HP world that I was completely engrossed from the very beginning.

I loved your Albus here by the way, really understated yet very in-character - pulling the stings like the ultimate puppet-master, very in the shadows but still in control, making sure it all turned out fine for both boys. I was thrilled with how their relationship evolved, very IC young Snape for me and their conversation ... oh their conversation! It was so adorable and for some odd reason, so very sad when they awkwardly went through the I like you process and so very funny next when Snape said yes to the other. It did make it very believable that Harry got to know the young Severus, and got close to him and then got to meet the old one, it was like a step towards knowing the real Snape, it opened the door for Harry, and equally for Severus I think. Very smart of Alby (and you) this.

Brilliant ending for me, again very believable and I liked how you did not go into too much of a detail, it was perfect the way it was. Again, I loved it, loved it to pieces! Thank you so very much, this is going on the favorites list and will be read time and again in days to come for sure!

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:35 pm UTC

	sookail 2008-05-20 04:06 pm UTC (link)
	Really loved it, especially the combination angry!shy!teenage!Snape and saying-stupid-things!Harry ;) Off to find more of your fic :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:36 pm UTC

	centaury_squill 2008-05-20 04:40 pm UTC (link)
	You already know how much I enjoyed your fic, and your final version is even better. Well done, hon! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:36 pm UTC

alisanne
2008-05-20 04:59 pm UTC (link)

Oh, but this was simply brilliant!
You really nailed all the characters here, especially the trio interactions.
Young Snape was so perfectly awful that he made me giggle. Well done!
Meddling!Albus is also a favorite of mine, incidentally.
When Snape turned back I got this sinking feeling that things were not going to go smoothly, and you definitely did not disappoint. It's interesting that even while I really love fluff, well done, searing h/c (the way you did it here) also gets me every time. The scene in the DADA classroom was superb and actually made me tear up. I wanted to smack Severus from here to Azkaban and back, so that's definitely a credit to your writing.
I didn't think the ending was abrupt at all, in fact this was perfectly paced. It's going on my favorites.
Really superb story!
I enjoyed how you incorporated out team mascots as well. :)
Yay Snarry!

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:44 pm UTC

	fbowden 2008-05-20 05:37 pm UTC (link)
	omg, darling, I'm just about to read and your summary already has me shivering in anticipation!! Fantastic summary LOL.. onto the fic--->>> (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:48 pm UTC

	hambares 2008-05-20 06:54 pm UTC (link)
	What a nice long story! Great job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:48 pm UTC

	gingertart50 2008-05-20 07:39 pm UTC (link)
	Lovely! This is terrific, I loved your teenaged Snape and Harry was so truly himself that it was almost scary. I loved it! And dragon-phoenix sex! Woot! Go Team Dragon! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:49 pm UTC

	bethbethbeth 2008-05-20 07:41 pm UTC (link)
	Very nicely done! I especially like the way the younger version of Snape isn't quite as unattractive physically, but is possibly even more unattractive in terms of his personality...until he's able to drop some of his suspicions. A very engaging story all the way through (I could happily have read another 40,000 words g) (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:50 pm UTC

dracofiend
2008-05-20 07:45 pm UTC (link)

Well. My oh my. This was absolutely GORGEOUS. I can't tell you how intense it felt, with all that adolescent angst, and how funny those moments of relief and comedy were. I mean, you really brought out the manic highs and depressive lows that no one ever forgets from teenagedness. I seriously felt a little crazy, for moments there. The Insanity? Augh. The ninety galleon dragon? Augh. The kissing and the moment when Harry doubts because Severus said 'like' but he didn't say 'like like'?? Augh! And THEN! And then the mirror of Erised and Harry reaching out like all his dreams have come true and the written-under-the-influence-yet-precisely-crafted letter!! Augh augh augh!!! (Fantastic touch, btw, in not showing us the full contents of that letter. Fantastic.)

I was really amazed at how deftly you worked the de-ageing and re-ageing angle so smoothly. I appreciated the absence of complex magical theory and explanations because honestly, I personally want to get to the good parts, where there's secret longing and angry self-beratement and private teeth-gnashing--and you brought it. Completely. I've never been a particular fan of time-turner or de-ageing stories but this fic highlights their appeal in such a vivid, alluring manner. Some aspects of the de-ageing theme in general might strike me as somewhat difficult--but you handled them beautifully here. If suddenly-teen!Snape's dialogue was a little wooden, well, it only enhances his out-of-place condition. If re-aged!Snape's apologies to Harry were unusually lavish, it only increases a reader's (or at least, my!) sympathy for, and empathy with, Harry, as he wishes and wishes he could see his eighteen year old friend again.

I have so much love for this fic and your characters. (Harry's 'um's were quite charming.) Our team is SO going to win. :D ♥

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:54 pm UTC

suze_y
2008-05-20 08:08 pm UTC (link)

Wonderful story! It follows so seamlessly from DH that, as I settled into reading it, I had this lovely feeling that here was the start of Book 8 (well, it is that time of year ...), the epilogue was just a bad dream, and everything was going to be all right after all. :-) Your Harry, Ron and Hermione are wonderful (I echo others' comments re: Ron's voice -- somehow he stood out as especially perfect in this one for me, too), and I loved the interaction between young/painfully awkward Snape and compassionate Harry -- and then later, adult/resistant Snape and persistent Harry. Perfect story, perfect ending -- you have made everything all right -- thank you!!

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:55 pm UTC

plantinshadows
2008-05-20 08:48 pm UTC (link)

ah a beautiful story! I loved that severus regained his age as well as memories and harry still fancies the socks off him!
also some absolutely hilarious lines:
"What, you going to pull my hair or something?" she challenged. "I’ll pull yours back."

"Mmmmf?" Ron asked, his mouth full.

"Go ahead," Harry said, having learned how to decode Ron’s muffled questions after far too long of eating beside him.

It was quiet, as usual, but there was always the risk of an unexpected Hermione.

(Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:56 pm UTC

	gina87 2008-05-20 09:04 pm UTC (link)
	Really liked it. Your trio interaction was soo much fun, really loved the way you wrote them. Wonderful story! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:56 pm UTC

	meri_oddities 2008-05-20 09:39 pm UTC (link)
	What a great, fun story. I so love teenaged!Snape. And I loved his interactions with Harry. They were so IC. I loved their slow coming together and how Snape slowly learned to trust. Then Snape and Harry had to get together again when Snape was no longer a teenager. I thought it all worked very well. Well done. (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 05:57 pm UTC

	fbowden 2008-05-20 09:43 pm UTC (link)
	Oh this was just fantastic, definitely one for my favourites folder. As someone commented about, every character was wonderfully IC. I loved loved loved young Snape and was really sad when he turned back after their first kiss, but I knew you would give us a wonderfully happy ending so congratulations and bravo, darling! xxx (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-21 06:00 pm UTC

	painless_j 2008-05-20 09:43 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, that was very enjoyable! Young Severus seems to be it this season, and it makes me all warm and glowy :) I liked how insecure he was when young, I liked the parade of teachers and Snape's disastrous DADA class; their fumblings were very hot and awwwsome. Thank you! (Reply to this) (Thread)

who_la_hoop, 2008-05-22 10:39 am UTC

Page 1 of 5
<<	[1] [2] [3] [4] [5]	>>