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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-05-01 08:24:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Ziasudra "Second Life"
Title: Second Life
Author: ziasudra
Team: Team Phoenix
Genre(s): Postwar
Prompt(s): Pensieve, Learning to Dance
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: R
Word Count: ~17,750 words
Summary: After sending Lily off to Hogwarts, Harry realised he had a lot of time he could now devote to his Snape obsession. Set post-war, fully canon and epilogue compliant, including canon-compliant Harry/Ginny to the best of my ability—no Ginny bashing here.
Disclaimer: Anything you recognise from the Harry Potter books belongs to JKR. I only play with them.
A/N: Thank you to jin_fenghuang and nenyaentwhistle for betaing!

"Second Life by Ziasudra"

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amand_r
2008-05-01 04:45 pm UTC (link)

Oh. My. God. You had me at Just like learning magic. Harry supposed that was true. Though he'd much rather flick and swish his wand than let it slip that, after all these years, he still didn't know where to put his left foot once Ginny stood back up from the dip.

But clones! and a Ginny that isn't shrewish! She's sharing! Woot!

You did a great job with nuance and symbol, and I have to applaud your use of Eileen Prince. She rocks.

Thank you so much for this!

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:07 pm UTC

	nenyaentwhistle 2008-05-01 04:48 pm UTC (link)
	you know how amazing i thought this was :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:08 pm UTC

plantinshadows
2008-05-01 05:57 pm UTC (link)

omg what a turn this story took, I mean: clones?!! I loved snape in the pensieve. uhh and his insecurity when showing harry his pervy moment, oh lovely!
it's nice that there is no angry ex-wife, on the other hand I wouldn't want to share...at all (neither sev or harry)!
I quite like the age difference between severus and harry, it's one more difficulty they have to get over.. however this fiction shows that mature harry can be just as hot as young and nubile one haha!

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:11 pm UTC

	klynie1 2008-05-01 06:38 pm UTC (link)
	Excellent story - I really like the mixture of Muggle covert science and magic. I especially like how you left Snape at the end - all hidden potential, ready to spring forth. Perfect. (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:13 pm UTC

	emmessann 2008-05-01 06:42 pm UTC (link)
	This was just delicious, and so atmospheric! I feel greedy for more, but I love what you've done. (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:15 pm UTC

	centaury_squill 2008-05-01 07:39 pm UTC (link)
	Intriguing blend of magic and sci-fi, and good to see Eileen Prince in a starring role. Great job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:16 pm UTC

	florida_minxie 2008-05-01 08:13 pm UTC (link)
	A very interesting story! I loved the blend of fantasy and sci-fi... and Snape's pervy moment made me chuckle. (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:17 pm UTC

alisanne
2008-05-01 09:05 pm UTC (link)

I didn't know where you were leading us with this, but when you got to clones I was thrilled! Very unique premise for a story, my dear!
And I ADORE your Eileen Prince. I like stories where she's alive somewhere (makes note to write some in the future) and you do her particularly well here.
I liked your Ginny, too (and that's saying something since I'm not generally fond of anyone's Ginny, lol). The way you wrote her and Harry's interactions was great. They make a good, comfortable couple together.
Obsessed yet self aware (and sweetly self deprecating) Harry was a treat, as were his inner thoughts, and Pensieve!Snape was awesome.
All in all a great story, hon.
Yay Team Phoenix!

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 12:22 pm UTC

	cruisedirector 2008-05-01 09:12 pm UTC (link)
	I love the Muggle clone story underlying this and Snape's mom as a hero of sorts without being the battered saint she sometimes gets turned into. Really well plotted! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 10:52 pm UTC

torino10154
2008-05-01 09:39 pm UTC (link)

What an intriguing mix of Muggle sci-fi and what we know of the Wizarding World. I love the pensieve and how much of Snape's memory as well as himself was hidden within it's depths. Hooray for Eileen-I always love her appearance in fic and you did a great job with her. Like

alisanne said usually no one write Ginny so I like her, but here she was one of the best I've seen. Great job.

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 10:56 pm UTC

wichie
2008-05-01 09:43 pm UTC (link)

Wow, what an astoundingly original form to give Snape's resurrection; brilliant really, given

a man who spent the majority of his adult life studying Horcruxes, who was able to invent spells in his teens, would come up with a better method of self-preservation
it'd make sense (in the same way, say, a bezoar would) for a Potions Master to craft a homunculus, but instead Muggles manage to craft one, ha.

Harry and Ginny being friends, and having a sort of 'white marriage', actually makes a great deal of sense, and I like it as a refreshing change from the general run of Snarry.

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:00 pm UTC

	josan 2008-05-01 09:55 pm UTC (link)
	"I'm talking about cloning experiments," High pitched SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!! OMG! It's an X-FILE!!!!! YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY! And a very well done X-File it has proven to be. (Mulder and Scully would be proud of you!) Bravo! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:03 pm UTC

	snarry_fan7 2008-05-01 11:24 pm UTC (link)
	An excellent and interesting story. I like the use of the clone and putting the memories in the clones body. Ginny was actually likable in this story too, it's so very rare for me to like her as a character. Lovely work.~Sophia (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:06 pm UTC

	freddie_mac 2008-05-01 11:42 pm UTC (link)
	oh my, what a novel twist on "Snape-survives-the-war"!!! This is why I like fanfic -- you took a piece of canon and dragged me along a path that I certainly didn't see, and I found myself enjoying every moment. Loved the secret of the mill, the mill's caretaker, Harry's obsession with the pensieve, and even understanding!Ginny. (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:08 pm UTC

	lalaith_niniel 2008-05-02 02:27 am UTC (link)
	I have to confess that this was kinda creepy, but it was also highly original and the premise definitely had me hooked. I love the inclusion of Eileen and her working her magic to keep clone!Snape alive. The softer Snape is also so very lovely to imagine. (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:13 pm UTC

	ex_lilyseyes671 2008-05-02 04:25 am UTC (link)
	Brilliant, very original, and wonderful! I loved your Harry! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:14 pm UTC

joanwilder
2008-05-02 04:32 am UTC (link)

Now here's a scenario I've not seen done: cloning. My god, it's brilliant. The way you had Harry visiting the memories, showing his quiet obsession over the years was a nice set-up for his feelings, which you then matched with Snape's in the detention memory. My favorite moment of the fic was when Snape finally addressed Harry in the 'dance' memory. It gave me shivers!

This bit made me crow in glee:
"You've been given more than snogging privileges, Severus."
"Witness my rejoicing," Snape said dryly.
"I am."

Thanks for such an enjoyable story--I spent the better part of the evening, happily reading. Great job!

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:21 pm UTC

	unbroken_halo 2008-05-02 04:46 am UTC (link)
	That was awesome! Deliciously creepy at times and yet wonderfully romantic as well between Harry and Snape. And YAY for not making Ginny a bitch! I loved the sci-fi take on the magics with the spook squad coming in. It really makes you wonder whether or not the Muggles really would have taken a wizard hostage to "study". (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:28 pm UTC

telwyrd
2008-05-02 06:38 am UTC (link)

Such a fascinating and richly detailed story with tantalizing peeks into Snape's shrouded past and some startling revelations, all of which kept me glued to the screen until the end. I was very impressed with your use of a cloned Snape combined with his scattered Pensieved soul to bring him back to life. Very original! Science mixed with magic is way cool.

Snape might have been a loner, but Harry suspected that over the past few months, Snape wasn't as much a loner as he was lonely.

::nods:: Yes, that sounds about right.

All six shelves of the bookcase next to the couch were crammed to the brim, and the lack of dust confirmed that Snape not only liked to collect books, but he'd actually read them.

Bibliophile!Snape is my kind of guy.

What he found instead was page after page of notes written in the margins, just like what the Half-Blood Prince used to do in his Potions textbook.

As is Erudite!Snape. There are so many different facets to Snape, all of which I find utterly fascinating. I really appreciated how you provided these glimpses of his inner self.

Ginny was very well-characterized throughout the story. She was nice and fair-minded, accepting of Harry's Snape obsession.

Harry and his interest in Snape was fun to read. The fact that it in no way detracts from his love of Ginny and his children was good.

She had also preserved a body that was his, but not really his, believing in her own version of optimism and acceptance that one day she would be able to bring him back.

The presence of Eileen Prince Snape was a pleasant surprise. I liked that she was fiercely protective of her cloned son's body and determined to find some way to restore him. A mum to be reckoned with, that's for sure.

A second chance. A second life. How wondrous it is! This was a most gratifying story on so many levels. All the characters were a delight to read, to cherish. I felt so happy at the end. Kudos to you!

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ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:50 pm UTC

	painless_j 2008-05-02 03:27 pm UTC (link)
	That was lovely :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-02 11:50 pm UTC

	gin_tonic 2008-05-03 12:13 am UTC (link)
	A Severus-clone! Brilliant idea, that! And a big hooray for Eileen being alive as well! :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-03 12:37 am UTC

miriravan
2008-05-03 02:00 am UTC (link)

I like this story very much. It's a clever way of bringing Snape back to life, one I haven't seen before, with enough detail to make it convincing but not so much hand-waving that the question of 'huh, would that really work?' overshadows the more important elements of the story.

I love the idea of Harry obsessively reviewing Snape's memories for 20 years, just because it's so very in character for him. He really is a person who tends to fixate on things, or on people, probably because he had so little in the way of real attachments as a child. And also, in Snape's case, I think because Harry is also a person who desperately wants to do what is *right*, and he realizes that in Snape's case, he didn't have the chance.

The interaction between the two of them in the pensieve is lovely, a nice balance of snark and dawning admiration on Snape's part, and of understanding and curiosity and growing desire on Harry's, and I was *so* pleased when they found the last memory and Harry basically forced Snape to acknowledge the fact that he (Harry) does in fact desire him. And the scene where they actually bring Snape back to life was very powerful.

I enjoyed your characterization of Ginny, and was glad that she and Harry had a happy life together, because honestly, the idea of him suffering for 20 years with some kind of self-absorbed harpy is just too miserable, and also IMHO, contradictory to what we know about Ginny in canon; she's young, yes, and perhaps rather shallow in some ways, but she's not a raving bitch. You presented them convincingly as a long-married couple, comfortable together, supportive of each other, accepting of each other's quirks and flaws. Eileen, too, was well-drawn as a survivor doing her best for her only child.

Nicely done.

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ziasudra, 2008-05-04 07:40 am UTC

	zephyr_macabee 2008-05-03 03:04 am UTC (link)
	Refreshingly different take on Snape's resurrection, the cloning was. I wonder if Severus will want to share Harry with Ginny for long? (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-04 07:45 am UTC

	trackpanties 2008-05-03 07:11 am UTC (link)
	ABSOLUTELY wonderful! Original like a breath of fresh air... You made my day with this story... YAY.YAY.YAY!!! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-04 07:46 am UTC

	simons_flower 2008-05-03 08:10 am UTC (link)
	There was something X-Files-ish about this fic, which isn't a bad thing by far. I think it flowed really well. The nuances of Harry's life, when he allows himself to think about them, are very telling. Great job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

ziasudra, 2008-05-04 07:48 am UTC

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