I think I'm going to end up spending most of the Games saying "Poor Harry" because I'm doing it again with this fic.
Poor Harry, so utterly, completely innocent. And Ron with his mini-harem. I like how you used the friendship here to contrast with Snape's behavior and personality. The thing that really got me though, was the pseudo-stand-in of Harry for Lily, despite Snape knowing it was Harry. I hope that makes sense.