Ooooo...creepy!Snape. Both Snape and Harry are very IC in this. Good job with that. I like the premise of this. Snape knew what he wanted and how to get it. I get the impression that he manipulated Harry the whole way; that when he told Harry about reading his thoughts and using them against him that he was telling the truth, a twisted sort of confession, knowing that Harry would take it as teasing.
But I admit to being a bit confused. Does Snape love Harry, though maybe in some twisted way? Also I get the impression that there's some importance to Harry's flinching in regards to his scar, but I couldn't figure out what it was. Was he just ashamed of the looks of it? Or was it Snape that cast the curse that caused it and Harry knew it? Hmmm....
Also that last paragraph...Was it just cementing the fact that Snape got what he wanted?
Harry stirred but didn't wake There are many ways to take that but I am curious...Care to enlighten me as to what you were thinking it meant when you wrote it?