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anotheryear (anotheryear) wrote in qaf_drabbles,
@ 2010-03-17 18:26:00

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author: anotheryear, challenge #151: author's choice

Challenge 151: Author's Choice
Title: Untitled
A/N: This is my first time writing a fic ever, so um...keep that in mind.
Beta: noteverything Thank you so much for your help!
And the condom goes to: don't really know how this works, but Babylon definitely could use a condom.

Now that I’ve asked, I can’t give up on the idea. I don’t understand why she won’t do it. It’s not as if she’s shy about her body, I know, I’ve seen the pictures!

She says she doesn't have the time, that she'll get bored sitting for hours on end. I know that's not the whole truth, but I let it stand.

I sketched her from memory when we first started dating, but she doesn't know that.

Finally, I have an idea, from a fellow blond artist with a surly partner. She always did look so radiant when she sleeps.

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	kari77 2010-03-17 11:15 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, my. This is gorgeous, truly gorgeous. And so true to the characters. It was like hearing Lindsay's voice. And I'd love to see the finished sketch. So great to see a drabble of the girls. You should definitely write more. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-18 05:03 am UTC (link)
	My first fic comment ever, and it is so amazing! THANK YOU. (I will probably read this comment over and over again!) I was really worried about Lindsay's voice but I'm glad to hear it came across well. And I think any sketch of Mel that Lindsay did would be very awesome. If only I had the artistic skills to come close :) (Reply to this) (Parent)

fun_demented
2010-03-17 11:22 pm UTC (link)

FANTATIC. You hit it out of the park your first time. I love your Lindsay voice, I love the way you set this up to reveal itself more and more as one reads on, I love that you mention Justin (heee) and I love that you bring it to a warm familiar place in the end. I also love that you mention things from canon without it seeming cliched or pulling me out of the story. Love this!!!!! Actually, this is my Lindsay/Mel I've read. I really hear and see them. Perfect tone, perfect voice, perfect subject. Totally their life.

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	fun_demented 2010-03-17 11:23 pm UTC (link)
	I alwlays leave out words! My FAVORITE Lindsay/Mel. It's going in my mems. (Reply to this) (Parent)

anotheryear
2010-03-18 05:09 am UTC (link)

Wow, thank you!
I am glad the sort of reveal thing worked out. I was concerned it didn't make sense other than in my head.
(Also Justin drawing Brian=really sexy. Therefore Linds drawing Mel=sexy as well).

Thank you for the great detailed feedback, I really do appreciate it. And it being your favorite Lindsay/Mel...well I don't think my newfound ego is ready to handle that kind of awesomeness ;)

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	fun_demented 2010-03-18 05:47 am UTC (link)
	Giggles madly Get used to good FB, you're good. :D (Reply to this) (Parent)

	danny_sparks 2010-03-17 11:33 pm UTC (link)
	Wow! What a fantastic and hot idea! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-18 05:10 am UTC (link)
	Thank you so much for reading - and commenting! (Reply to this) (Parent)

wavingcat5
2010-03-17 11:46 pm UTC (link)

I just love this! I love Mel/Linds fic, ITA with others that your Lindsay voice is just right. You got the charm of Lindsay as well.

I've always loved the story about Mel doing the glamour modelling in college, and this is a unique - and sweet - way to tie it into a story - and one that reflects Lindsay's character and their relationship, as well as her relationship with Brian and Justin.

I have an idea, from a fellow blond artist with a surly partner. She always did look so radiant when she sleeps. I can just hear the smile in Lindsay's voice as she says this! Great punchline. ^__^

I wish I wrote this drabble. ♥

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anotheryear
2010-03-18 05:18 am UTC (link)

I'm grinning like a crazy person now, reading all these supportive comments. THANK YOU.

Lindsay is a complicated woman and hearing I got her voice anywhere close to right is a great compliment.

Once the idea struck me about Lindsay wanting to draw Melanie, everything just made so much sense. And I'm glad the reference to Mel's modeling pictures worked out properly.
I was sort of proud of the punchline too even though it seemed kind of trite.

&hearts &hearts

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wavingcat5
2010-03-18 06:19 am UTC (link)

I seem to be doing back and forth commenting today :). I just couldn't let slide that you were worried the punchline sounded trite. In fact, it is just the kind of playful, slightly tongue-in-cheek-but-affectionately-so line that the writers of the show often do use. The dialogue on QaF is often a little more thought-out and literary than in real life - they say things we wouldn't and that's what's so fun about it. Your punchline sounds exactly like that QaF style, and as a bonus it sounds very Lindsay.

And Brian as 'surly!' Gotta love that. ^__^

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	secretsolitaire 2010-03-18 02:34 am UTC (link)
	This is fantastic, especially the last line! You should keep writing. :-) (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-18 05:21 am UTC (link)
	Thank you so much! I was not expecting such a great response for my first fic. I think it was a fluke though :) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	noteverything 2010-03-18 02:56 am UTC (link)
	:-D Told you that last line was golden! Excellent job on your first drabble...thanks for letting me see it before anyone else! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-18 05:24 am UTC (link)
	You are the best, that's why. You fixed up all the stuff I didn't need and I really appreciate that. I am so overwhelmed by the responses too; I never expected so much. And you were the one who helped me feel confident enough to post it, so thank you! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	anyusa0030 2010-03-18 03:43 am UTC (link)
	you should absolutely do more writing you are good really good. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-18 05:25 am UTC (link)
	Thank you so much! I never expected I would get such great feedback on my first try. Glad you enjoyed it! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	(Anonymous) 2010-03-18 05:20 pm UTC (link)
	Well for a first time you sure knocked that one outta the park! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-19 12:56 am UTC (link)
	Thanks for the great compliment! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ahaw9913 2010-03-20 02:41 am UTC (link)
	This is just absolutely lovely!! It's hard to believe that you haven't been writing for years!! I am eagerly awaiting reading more from you! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-20 05:40 am UTC (link)
	Wow thank you! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! And thank you for the encouragement! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	happier_bunny 2010-03-29 12:39 am UTC (link)
	Nicely done. :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

	anotheryear 2010-03-29 02:44 am UTC (link)
	Thank you!! (Reply to this) (Parent)