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NotEverything (noteverything) wrote in qaf_drabbles,
@ 2010-01-19 22:22:00

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author: ne, challenge #144: four words

*Challenge #144: Four words
Title: L'altra Notte in Fondo al Mare
Notes: Thank you to vl_redreign for the beta! Four words: burn, rug, glass, ease
And the condom goes to: Daphne Chanders

Ted lay holding a glass gingerly on his chest as Emmett banged around the kitchen. The rug was practically his new home, even though his back was better. He liked to relax there after visiting Dr. Mark, letting the high ease through him, aided by a stiff drink.

Emmett rambled on; something about how he’d almost burned his cheese tartlets while he was on the phone with Vic. He never paused to see if Ted was really paying attention.

Ted felt a twinge of guilt, but it passed quickly. He took another sip of his drink and drifted away again.

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	xie_xie_xie 2010-01-20 04:40 am UTC (link)
	Painful and excellent. Brava. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 06:53 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you for reading and commenting! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	secretsolitaire 2010-01-20 05:03 am UTC (link)
	Oooh. Wonderfully done. (And you didn't even include a glass dildo! LOL.) This icon is way too happy for this, but it's the only one I have of these two... (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 07:26 pm UTC (link)
	You have one more Ted/Em icon than I do! I tried to avoid the glass dildo for my drabbles this week...hopefully Justin will be glad for a bit of a break! Thank you for always reading and commenting on my drabbles...it's much appreciated. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	frantic_quest 2010-01-20 05:10 am UTC (link)
	oh...sad but powerful! Poor guys. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 07:37 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you for reading and commenting. "Powerful" is a great compliment. (((hugs))) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	vl_redreign 2010-01-20 06:51 am UTC (link)
	As I told you, I love S3 Ted. Of all the people to fall apart, he was a perfect candidate. So high strung, it was bound to happen. Beautiful drabble, my dear. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 06:54 pm UTC (link)
	It's heartbreaking, but it also led to some of the most compelling scenes ever. Thank you! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	fun_demented 2010-01-20 07:20 am UTC (link)
	Oh wow. This. Is. AWESOME. Unexpected and totally IC and perfect. Very clear visuals and senses in this one. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 06:56 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you! It seems next to impossible to come up with anything unexpected anymore, so I'm thrilled that it worked! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	fun_demented 2010-01-20 08:40 pm UTC (link)
	Very unexpected. You always come up with unique stuff! Let me know if you want any prompts!!!!!!!! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	_alicesprings 2010-01-20 11:50 am UTC (link)
	I watched this arc recently and you captured the beginning of Ted's downward spiral perfectly. So sad :( (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-01-20 06:57 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you! It's definitely sad, but it made for some great drama, didn't it? (Reply to this) (Parent)

	wavingcat5 2010-01-21 12:03 am UTC (link)
	You've captured exactly what Ted must have been going through. I often find it hard to like Ted in this arc, but you bring out my empathy for him here. There's so much storytelling in this 100 words. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:28 am UTC (link)
	I'm glad I could bring some empathy to Teddy for you. I really feel for him throughout this arc. (Reply to this) (Parent)

besamislabios
2010-01-21 12:30 am UTC (link)

I'm so curious about your choice of title? Did Ted used to listen to this aria in QaF? I googled it and I listened to it, a version by Maria Callas, while reading and it fits perfectly the mood of your drabble. It almost made me cry, that arc is so intense and poignant, so much hurt and pain between those two despite having been such loving friends before.

Loved this!! ♥

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noteverything
2010-02-01 04:37 am UTC (link)

Thank you!

Sorry it took me so long to answer...

Actually, I was going to use Drift Away as the title, but it seemed sort of trite, so I translated Drift Away to Italian, since Ted loves opera. I didn't like the way that looked. Then I googled Drifting Away (the song) and found that "L'altra Notte in Fondo al Mare" was used as the intro for a version of the song by Faithless, so I translated that to English and it was "the other night at the bottom of the sea," and I thought that was *totally* perfect, so I used it.

That's probably WAY more than you wanted to know!

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	testdog65 2010-01-21 12:31 am UTC (link)
	Just a little snippet of time, but you've presented it so richly here. Wonderfully done! ~Ellen (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:37 am UTC (link)
	Oh, thank you Ellen! I like little snippets like this...a lot! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ahaw9913 2010-01-21 12:58 am UTC (link)
	Loved getting to see this snippet of time from Ted's perspective! It's hard to read, but you created a powerful picture of Ted's fall. Wonderful! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:37 am UTC (link)
	smooches you to bits Thank you! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	anotheryear 2010-01-21 02:47 am UTC (link)
	I really liked this, it really showed the sad state Ted was in during that time period. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:38 am UTC (link)
	Thank you so much!! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	happier_bunny 2010-01-22 01:56 am UTC (link)
	OUCH! so well done! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:38 am UTC (link)
	Oh, I'm always so glad when you comment on my drabbles! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	kari77 2010-01-26 10:21 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, Teddy. You captured him very well at the beginning of his descend. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2010-02-01 04:38 am UTC (link)
	Thank you Kari!! (Reply to this) (Parent)