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NotEverything (noteverything) wrote in qaf_drabbles,
@ 2008-01-03 10:28:00

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author: ne, challenge #46: e.e.cummings

*Challenge #46: e.e. cummings*
Title: This and That
Warnings/Author's Notes: This one is odd. Please feel free to offer criticism. I honestly don't mind, in fact, I'd like people to do that more often. :D
And the condom goes to: Brian.

Justin kissed a line from Brian’s thigh to the crease in his leg. Between kisses, he mouthed something, almost silently.

"What the fuck are you saying?" Brian asked.

Justin looked up sheepishly. "Just a line from a poem."

"Let’s hear it."

" 'I like kissing this and that of you.' "

"I prefer 'they speak whatever’s on their mind, they do whatever’s in their pants, the boys I mean are not refined, they shake the mountains when they dance.' "

Justin laughed. Brian pretended to look pained. "You don’t like it?"

"I like mine better."

"Actually, so do I. Keep kissing."

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	herefordroad 2008-01-03 04:47 pm UTC (link)
	sorry, can't criticize...i love it! lots of fun: "I prefer 'they speak whatever’s on their mind, they do whatever’s in their pants, the boys I mean are not refined, they shake the mountains when they dance.' " and as you can see, i rarely capitalize a letter, like e.e. cummings!! jeannie (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-03 06:01 pm UTC (link)
	Hehehe...I used to be a non-cap typist, but it started making me type that way for work, so I stopped! And thank you...for kind comments on the drabble. Lynna (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ex_4cupcakes771 2008-01-03 05:01 pm UTC (link)
	they are so smart, those boys...i love that they are both so literary...and get each other's references...you captured that so sweetly! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-03 06:03 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you. And they are smart. Smarter than I am, which definitely makes for a challenge! I was really taken by the poem though and wanted to write for this one... (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	ex_4cupcakes771 2008-01-04 05:51 am UTC (link)
	Well, I'm glad you did...It was lovely. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	brianslave68 2008-01-03 05:23 pm UTC (link)
	No criticism....I loved it! Nice job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-03 06:04 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you my dear. :D (Reply to this) (Parent)

	ohfreckle 2008-01-03 07:10 pm UTC (link)
	That's so not add, it's lovely ♥ (Reply to this) (Thread)

	ohfreckle 2008-01-03 07:49 pm UTC (link)
	so not odd Geez, I can't type. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-03 09:08 pm UTC (link)
	That's ok...and thanks!! I appreciate your comment! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	xie_xie_xie 2008-01-03 08:14 pm UTC (link)
	Err, why did you think this was odd? It's quite, quite lovely and IC. (Reply to this) (Thread)

noteverything
2008-01-03 09:01 pm UTC (link)

*shrugs* I'm not sure how to explain it, but it's like the drabbles I've written lately just appear. I sat down to write this morning and didn't have anything already written in my mind like I often do. So then when it was done, I was slightly surprised...

That probably makes NO sense at all. Also, I haven't been getting anything beta'd lately. That might be part of it.

But...thank you for "it's quite, quite lovely and IC." :)

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	happier_bunny 2008-01-03 08:15 pm UTC (link)
	flails faints (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-03 09:02 pm UTC (link)
	hugs TY! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	secretsolitaire 2008-01-03 11:29 pm UTC (link)
	This is sweet! Whether or not either of them would spout poetry in bed is perhaps up for debate, but I think it works. :-) (Reply to this) (Thread)

noteverything
2008-01-04 03:42 am UTC (link)

Whether or not either of them would spout poetry in bed is perhaps up for debate...

It totally *IS*...but I think that if Justin was caught up in the moment, feeling romantic, he might let something like that slip. And Brian...*IF* he wasn't in a completely snarky mood, and if Justin's kissing him like that then he's probably NOT, would just *have* to show Justin that he knows a thing or two about cummings as well. I'm just saying...

And I'm glad you thought it was sweet...thank you!!

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	secretsolitaire 2008-01-04 03:57 am UTC (link)
	Yup, I buy it! And hey, any excuse to throw around some poetry. :-D (Reply to this) (Parent)

	testdog65 2008-01-03 11:38 pm UTC (link)
	OK, I liked this. A lot. I second what secretsolitaire said, BUT I definitely think that if Justin had said what he did, Brian would absolutely have responded as he did here. So for me, it works. And yay, you for accomplishing it! ~Ellen (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-04 03:43 am UTC (link)
	LOL...I just said what you said to secretsolitaire, only I used way too many words! And I'm glad that it worked for you. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	_alicesprings 2008-01-03 11:52 pm UTC (link)
	Nice :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-04 03:38 am UTC (link)
	Thanks...! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	faile02 2008-01-04 12:44 am UTC (link)
	Oh my god, I love it. I love it so much. Two poems! Two of my favorites, from my favorite poet! I love you! I really like how you worked Brian's literary wit into it, and Justin's vague sense of romance. Eeee! I'm sorry, cummings excites me. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-04 03:37 am UTC (link)
	This feedback totally made my day...I could tell from your comments that you really like e.e. cummings, so if you LOVE it, then I'm extremely happy. hugs (Reply to this) (Parent)

	miley 2008-01-04 12:49 am UTC (link)
	Oh, love, love, LOVE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 Giastin mumbling such a thing against Brian's skin is...HOT. ___ (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-04 03:35 am UTC (link)
	grins I'm so glad you like it. And that you found it hot. Makes me feel like I've paid you back a little for all the amazing icons you make. licks (Reply to this) (Parent)

	singlewoman 2008-01-04 02:26 am UTC (link)
	No criticism here, I really like this. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	noteverything 2008-01-04 03:33 am UTC (link)
	Thanks...I'm glad! (Reply to this) (Parent)