Riddle me this, troll: are you actually serious, or were you just in the mood for a wank? I find it difficult to believe that you'd lavish praise on some of the utterly atrocious stories you have saved in your LJ memories, yet take issue with something like subjunctive mood in this story.

To the O.P.: much as it pains me to admit it, there are a few errors. However, they're minimal and understandable if English isn't your first language. In all, the story flowed well and the interactions were lovely. Furthermore, I commend you for responding to the above comment in a mature, reasonable fashion. I wouldn't have been able to conduct myself with such grace.