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The Porn Santa (smutmas_mod) wrote in merry_smutmas,
@ 2007-12-30 12:00:00

Entry tags:

fic, severus/harry

Merry Smutmas, ziasudra!

To: ziasudra
From: bethbethbeth

Title: Himself His Own Dungeon
Rating: R/NC-17
Pairing: Snape/Harry, future Snape/Harry/Voldemort implied
Disclaimer: If I were JKR, this would have been the plot for the epilogue. Or possibly not.
Warnings: Fellatio, rimming, anal, infidelity, nappies, rubber ducks, and laundry rooms.
Summary: Snape isn't quite as dead as everyone thinks. Neither is Voldemort.
Author's Notes: Much love to ziasudra; to A, B, C (and sometime D) for amazing rescue services, far above and beyond the call of beta duty; and to Gina, for inspiration, dedication, and her almost infinite patience.

Himself His Own Dungeon

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	black_star_neb 2007-12-30 06:27 pm UTC (link)
	Wow! This was amazing. I knew what was going to happen with Snape and baby Voledemort but was still shocked. Loved it, great story. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:45 pm UTC

	schemingreader 2007-12-30 06:55 pm UTC (link)
	Oh that was dark! Harry nursed a viper in his bosom. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:45 pm UTC

schemingreader, 2008-01-07 12:17 am UTC

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:48 am UTC

	svartalfur 2007-12-30 07:04 pm UTC (link)
	A fascinating descent into madness. I wonder what was real in the end. Fantastic job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:46 pm UTC

	ziasudra 2007-12-30 07:18 pm UTC (link)
	Eeee, I'm so glad to see this posted! Alas, I have a Very Important Family Function to go to today. But I now have something to look forward to as a reward of getting through the day! Thank you in advance :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:46 pm UTC

	lesyeuxverts 2007-12-30 08:35 pm UTC (link)
	Brilliant! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:46 pm UTC

	bridgetmkennitt 2007-12-30 08:53 pm UTC (link)
	Oh wow! Poor Harry and his descent into madness. Was that even Snape there at all or was it Voldemort the entire time, bidding his time until Harry could somehow bring his soul into Snape's body? Either way, I liked it. Lovely work! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:47 pm UTC

	ulreyn 2007-12-30 08:55 pm UTC (link)
	Wow, great job twisting things up and playing with fantasy vs. reality! I think Harry's going mad. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:48 pm UTC

	secretsolitaire 2007-12-30 09:22 pm UTC (link)
	OH! Oh yes!! This was deliciously creepy all the way through, but I totally wasn't expecting that ending! flails I felt so badly for Ginny in this, though of course I could see the appeal of the dream world for Harry -- a sort of idealized inverse of his real life. This was excellent, mystery author. :-) (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:49 pm UTC

	zephyr_macabee 2007-12-30 10:23 pm UTC (link)
	Seriously creepy and beautifully sustained. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:49 pm UTC

	aqua_chuu 2007-12-30 11:38 pm UTC (link)
	Wow, really intense and compelling. A stunning piece! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:50 pm UTC

	tenshinochouwa 2007-12-31 03:58 am UTC (link)
	Beautifully creepy - this was fabulous! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:50 pm UTC

	snarry_fan7 2007-12-31 06:06 am UTC (link)
	Oh wow; so very dark and lovely. I love the perception of sanity versus insanity and how you can't really tell the difference between them. Excellent work!~Sophia (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:51 pm UTC

	odogoddess 2007-12-31 07:18 am UTC (link)
	Creepy! Dark, disturbing, yet erotic and sweet. Nice job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:52 pm UTC

lookfar
2007-12-31 01:27 pm UTC (link)

YEEP! That skeerd the pants off me! I thought they were going to raise little Tom up and make him good and all. This is so carefully constructed and considered! I salute you. So it was all Tom, after all? Ewwww. *shivers* Very convincing scenes of domestic unhappiness, btw, although I suspect that wizards are breast, not bottle feeders -- or at least Weasley women.

Great job.

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bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:53 pm UTC

	ariadneelda 2007-12-31 05:23 pm UTC (link)
	Oooh, how wonderfully creepy! Beautifully written and what a great ending! Loved it. :-) (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:53 pm UTC

ziasudra
2007-12-31 07:07 pm UTC (link)

First of all, THANK YOU, Secret Santa. Thank you soooo much! This is the best New Years gift I could've ever asked for. Do we know each other? I have a suspicion that we do, seeing how you seemed to have hit quite a lot of my kinks.

As the comments above have mentioned, this is creepy, but a very well done, intriguing kind of creepy. I love how the line between dream and reality (or is it insanity vs. sanity?) becomes gradually more blurred as the story goes on. But we don't know for sure, since the story is told from Harry's POV and he really does believe in everything that happened in his dreams. In contrast, the day-to-day home life of the Potter-Weasley household is almost too normal.

I like Harry's interaction with his family very much. All the little magical details are great — spelling bath bubbles in different colors, the rubber duck that changes the pattern of its skin... hehe, I want one for myself! *g* Then there's the very reasonable concerns from Ginny. As much as she can come across as annoying and I just want Harry to go spend more time with Snape (heh), I feel for her, who's practically a single mother with three children.

But of course, there's Snape, and what an awesome Snape! The Post-DH universe is ripe for angsty and not-quite-right Snarry, and you did this wonderfully.

And Snape, well . . . after the life he'd led in the real world, was it any wonder that he didn't want to risk losing what he'd found here? Was it any wonder that he couldn't quite trust that things would be this perfect outside of the dream-scape?

That's the contrast between Snape and Harry, isn't it? Snape's weariness from the crappy life he'd had, juxtaposed with Harry's desire to play the savior, to do all he can to wake Snape up. Add Tom into the mix, and you have a dysfunctional "family" that could only work in the dream world. Of course, Harry is too much of an optimistic Gryffindor to leave it at that, even if he seems to have understood Snape's reluctance to wake up by the end.

And the sex is yummy! "It was one of your better efforts, I'll say that for it." *snorts* So very Snape-ish :D

The ending is literally a nightmare come to life, but this time it's not Voldemort alone, it's he and Snape sharing some sort of a strange symbiotic relationship inside Snape's body. I do think there's a part of Snape somewhere in there, or at least that was my initial interpretation of the last few paragraphs when I first read them. They will either have to learn to coexist with one another somehow, or will kill each other very quickly. I'm hoping the relationship Harry'd developed with both of them inside the dream sequence will carry over. But there's another part of me that loves the fact that it ends in utter dystopia. *g*

Again, thank you very much for such a lovely, dark, and all-around compelling read! *glomps you*

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bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:55 pm UTC

	jeddy 2008-01-01 06:18 am UTC (link)
	Wonderfully creepy. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:56 pm UTC

	ships_harry 2008-01-01 10:27 pm UTC (link)
	Yes!!!! The ending! There was such a wonderful edge of the sinister running through this all the way - caring edging into obsession - and that damned creepy soul baby... This was great. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:57 pm UTC

	Creepy! (Anonymous) 2008-01-02 02:04 am UTC (link)
	Wonderfully wicked. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:56 pm UTC

	painless_j 2008-01-02 06:02 am UTC (link)
	Oh my, it was like watching a train wreck! Compelling and crazy and scary but wonderfully done! Thank you! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-06 11:57 pm UTC

kennahijja
2008-01-02 07:12 pm UTC (link)

Brrrr, that was scary! I suspected this would not be a happy reunion even if Snape woke up, what with Harry isolating himself and fleeing into dreams, and the constant presence of the baby and the way Harry comes to care for it almost by accident, and most of all Snape's warning to leave things alone... Still, the ending gave me shivers. I wonder whether it has always been Tom, impersonating Snape, or whether waking Snape's body gave him the power to chuck Snape's mind out of his body... It's the sort of ambiguity that leaves you pondering, and I enjoy that lots in a fic.

I loved the contrast between Harry's 'real' family life (ever-so-slightly overtaxing him, but Ginny even more) and his 'dream life' with Snape and the baby - both are such, well, mockeries of each other.

Excellent, creepy fic, mystery writer!

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bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:50 am UTC

	aragolas 2008-01-03 02:05 am UTC (link)
	Oooh! shivers (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:51 am UTC

	chinatree 2008-01-03 03:01 pm UTC (link)
	Very enjoyable. (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:52 am UTC

	ms_katonic 2008-01-03 10:26 pm UTC (link)
	Horrifyingly creepy, but I enjoyed it. There was a tingling sense of inevitability about the whole descent into madness and darkness, but the ending shocked even me. Good job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:53 am UTC

	ciel_vert 2008-01-04 05:24 pm UTC (link)
	Wow, that ending was so creepy, but I loved it! (Reply to this) (Thread)

bethbethbeth, 2008-01-07 12:53 am UTC

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