|Zanne Chaos (emilie_burns) wrote in chaotic_library,|
@ 2007-06-08 20:48:00
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Zanne's Fic Comments - Backup 3
ED x RIZA FICS
To Turn the Tables
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:D Y helo thar. ♥ I like this piece. :3~~ Good old-fashioned bump'n'grind is something most smut writers don't do- it's all about penetration- so it's refreshing to see something different.
lakjflajfl;kjflskajf *_* Hot DAMN.
Poor Riza. She always has to put up with the most stubborn of men.
When she went still, relaxing against the bed, he kissed her ear gently. "Now we can get undressed," he whispered, and she swore softly again, an epithet that made him chuckle, a low and husky sound. "That's the general plan."
I think Edward would drive me absolutely off-the-wall mental with that attitude. XD Also: plotbunnies never deliver. NEVER!
Lovely job, Zanne. :D ♥
From: emilie_burns::hands over Odo's bucket::
Wow, that was surprisingly awesome! I don't care for the pairing, yet I read this out of sheer curiousity. Now I'm glad I did because that was well done! Very hot! Ed's such a bastard. Riza needs to get her revenage. XD
From: he-dreams-awakeOMG yes. I mean, I do not OBJECT to Ed/Riza, HELLLL no, it's just not one I've seen a lot of. But oh my GOD I need a cold shower. Well-done! *bats eyes*
*runs off to the shower*
Humping should not be so hot. ::falls over dead with glee::
*makes goldfish faces*
You didn't succumb to the bunnies??
But then again, Ed hasn't succumbed yet, so...
God, Ed's still a smarmy brat in the bedroom too.
i love this! you are amazing!
*nosebleed* cold shower time!
;______________________; I hate you. ♥ This was beautiful and heartwrenching and I love the idea of him slipping an envelope like that in her casket because it's so very Ed and ouchyouchyouchy. I hate you. ;_;
*just...is going to curl up and cry because that is hurty and ouch and ;__________________________;*
MEAN. ;________________; butohgodiloveyouforit.
This was damn good, and painful. Ow. ;_;
Oh, Ed... ;_; So like you.
Wow ;.; *sniff sniff*
*_______* I still love this. I love this couple so much, it's so nice to see more being done for them. ♥ (I should take my own advice and add to the Ed/Riza corner of the fandom, huh?) ♥ So much love for this piece.
♥ Very nice.
You're making me like this pair too much, curse you and your writing.
I loved this short little double-drabble. *_*
This is a really sweet fic, and well-written too. You matched the theme to a T.
Aww and love. ;_;
Nice work with this pairing!
*big chibi eyes* This is SO beautiful!
Sad! Now I want them to stay or her to go with them! How do you do this? I totally don't ship Ed/Riza.
And you know what?
It was just last night when I was saying that the fandom 'needs MOAR ED X HAWKEYE!' (I think it was just seeing them interact in recent chapters that inspired this thought. It wasn't subtext-y per se, but it was... well, they just seem like they could be easily comfortable together.)
And then you came along. <3 This was beautiful and subtle and so... special. I particularly like the analogy tied in, of their duties to that goal being akin to religious devotion, with the proper sacrifices. And seeing her long for that fiery youthful life was so sad... :(
I feel like doing some art now. :/
I love it! I love your comparison of Ed to a sort of heat that expands and touches those around him.
Wow... absolutely amazing. *pets Ed*
Poor Ed.... It must be so hard being lost like that. ::wipes away the tears in her eyes::
... Awwwwwwww! *fluffed between the eyes*
*giggles* So cuuuute! ^^
Awww, this was too adorable. X3 ::giggles::
awwww. he he he hee. Al winz.
Very nice! :D
*beats back impending heart attack upon reading first sentence of intro*
*heart attack happens anyway*
Wow. Beautiful, beautiful. Rhythmic and rich, so full.
This is the sort of sexual narrative they put up in museums because it is so beautiful.
(and, er, I'm normally not an Elricester)
Really nice, and it's quite tasteful, not just smut. :3
And YAY for Elricest. xP
Remember the comment I left in your journal about making happy noises despite not reading it yet?
I can't even get the happy noises out now. Oh my GODS, Zanne, this is so perfect. Thank you. Just... thank you so much. This is beautiful. The imagery, the flow, just... all of it. Thank you.
From: emilie_burns::grins:: Score. ^_^
I've actually been chewing on the idea of doing a fic for you for a present even before that post you made, but I had no idea if I'd manage to find something. I was at a complete loss for what to write, since it's not a preferred pairing, and that's for one I can at least suss out a reason and foundation for, so it was pretty much my only choice. XD;; We have other pairings in common but I wanted to do something for you.
So for the longest while, I had a pairing and nothing to do about it. Then yesterday, I go to church after being up all night, come home, finish up the last chapter of Crocus Angustifolius, post it, and stumble off to bed. I'm all cozy, half-asleep, got a purring cat on me when along comes a rabid plotbunny biting like mad "ZOMG U RITE NOW BITCH ::whipcrack!::" O_o;;; I write it, post it under filter (away from you :D) on PBA, crash, reread it when I get up, tweak it more... yay! Smut!
::points to reaction:: That's what I was shooting for. ♥ ^_^ Happy Holidays, hon. ::HUGS::
Wow, this was simply lovely... <3
This is just gorgeous. Simply gorgeous.
I'm not usually one for religious metaphors, but this certainly changed my mind. Short and sweet. Beautiful.
okay, i want to hang out in your suite when we get to hell. i bet you get the crystal and the good peanuts for plucking the symbolism out of those wonderful verses!
That was really good use of biblical imagery. The use of bible passages and just the images of God/Christ in relation to the two were beautiful.
That last passage made me go @_@... the meanings it implies after that story... (you meant it to be that way I'm sure, but it still made me go like that).
...Beautiful. Completely stunning. ♥
Wow. I love it. You used those bible passages SO well! Beautiful. ♥
WE'RE ALL GOING TO HELL!!! :D
My god(literally). When I go to hell, I think I'll stalk you like nothing else. Symbolism freak, at your service. *bow*
Wow... It's amazing.
Another lovely piece. I love how the words flow so beautifully. ♥3
"Prove me. Defy your precious science and logic and believe this is real. Who'd believe you?"
Now *there's* the Envy we all love to hate.
Great piece of work.
O my wow....
There is no way i'm falling asleep tonight...
... ouch. Holy fuck, ouch. D: ::wibbles at you:: This is so the Envy we all know and hate/love. ♥
*Nods* Yes, great Envy lines. Great fic!
Very nice mind-fuck. I like this charactarization of Envy -- as more into screwing the brain than screwing the body, as almost asexual, but able to use sexuality as a weapon to provoke a reaction. And it's nice to see rape as an act of violence instead of the whole dreadful rape=love formula.
I have to agree with velevet mace about the rape aspect. As uncomnfortable as it made me to read, I highly applaud the fact that you depicted it as what it really is.
This is Envy at his nastiest. Which is to say, it's perfect!
I told you while I was beta-ing it, and I'll say it again- this has got to be the hottest thing I've ever read. *____* The second you told me the original MI, I knew this was gonna be much with the awesome. *_____* Mmmmmmmm.... ♥
ZOMG, someone finally wrote something besides $(^&$ing zoofic or Roy/Ed and it's for me and has Envy and Ed and SEX! Really hot sex, no less. *bounces, nosebleeds*
(And this: The sin was the alpha and omega of his hatred and desires.? I'm going to run away and elope with that line and bear its children, ok?)
Murrrr... Thank you!
::squirms in her seat:: Seeeeeeeeeeeeeexxxxxxxx!!!!
Oh sure, Zanne, go post something that makes me all hot and bothered in all the good ways while I'm BLEEDING. -_-; Thanks.
I, clearly, enjoyed it. Immensely. Far more than I should have. Gnah.
*wipes up a puddle of drool* You do realize you just completely blew my brain, yes? Good ^_^
That was, in a word, HAWT. *puts this in the community memories and her personal memoris*
FUCKING AWESOME Zanne. ♥ ♥ You got them IC, and it was SO AWESOME.
This was wonderful.
Awesome fic. You have made me a very, very happy lady!
Perfect. Utterly perfect. <3 Meming and reccing the pair of them.
If I tried to explain the levels of perfection here, I'd be incoherent.
I love you guys! *sniffles*
Wow, those are both... Insanely marvelous and painful all at the same time. It kind of hurts to read them. Good job, I can't even begin to explain how beautiful these are.
I have a question, though. What does Randy Milholland have to do with this?
From: emilie_burnsIt hurt to write them. Al had me sobbing.
(Have you read S*P the last day or so? That's when that Envy started poking at yuuo. Territory this hurty and twisty aren't places we normally like going.)
From: imxnotxshortOh...my God, that was freaking sad. o.o and now I can't wait to see what the next one is gonna be. See, I don't read S*P too often so that there's more to read when I get to it.
Between the three of these, and some aspects of FMA tonight I think I'm gonna cry...
Oh. Did Al just do what I think he did...
From: emilie_burnsYes. o_o Believe me, I did not see that coming either. yuuo was telling me about Envy, I started getting clear mental visuals of a 40-something Al and Envy's stones finally running out, I went AFK for a smoke and a bite to eat, and I started getting narration running in my head and had to run back and start typing out what I was hearing before it drove me nuts.
I was NOT expecting him to do that. At all. I just kinda stared at what got typed and blinked.
"I never want to be separated from you again." Ed was there, he put Envy there... Who'd put him in there? The Al I was hearing there was very tired and apathetic. ;_______; I think he piped up just to keep us from having to write anything about this more than we did. The bunnies would NOT go away.
From: rena-starsongOh. Oh. I seem to be unable to speach coherently.
Winry is gonna be PISSED. Very pissed. Oh dear.
I was NOT expecting him to do that. At all. I just kinda stared at what got typed and blinked
XD I find that funny. In a hightly twisted way.
From: emilie_burnsThat's pretty much how I felt. -_-;; I'm not entirely sure how anyone will react and I ain't lookin' back over there to find out. I do know Al lived pretty remote and far off from others to keep Envy from hurting anyone, so... yeah. I dunno. I just wanted the bunnies to stop biting and go away before they totally shattered my cold, black, merciless heart into a gibbering puddle of goo.
From: rena-starsongOh dear. Once again my vocab has died. -_-;;
...ouch. >_< I think I physically felt that one. Though still well written and so very, very sad. Like, you know how if you get smacked in the face there's that moment where your vision just blanks for a second? When I read that last line...
Total, total love.
So very inspirational. :D
and I am cursing at myself for not fully understanding the last line, though I do know it's strong.
From: acdragonmasterYou don't get the last line? It's implying that Al's sealing himself inside the tomb with Ed and Envy, therefore drawing the chalk circle on the inside of it, rather than outside.
So not what I was thinking.
I just hope Winry will understand why I drew the circle on the inside.
This one line had me in tears. So awesome.
Very good. And touching. ;_; Nicely written and emotional.
One nit though: "How many decades has it been? Almost thirty, at the least." That would make Al around 300+. ^_~
From: emilie_burns::HEADDESK!:: You can probably see my brain switched gears in years there. I meant 3 decades/30 years, and got tangled up. Thanks for catching it. XD;;; ::goes to fix::
Wow. I followed this from yuuo's site and was instantly pulled by the heart strings from this fic. After reading the first one; which moved me, considering it takes a LOT to draw me off my normal stolic demeanor, I was brought to tears towards the end of this wonderful fic. Indeed sad and emotional. I commend you for being able to break me.
You both are wonderful! Kudos and keep up the fantastic work!
**I think the plotbunnies are gonna eat my brain now x.x I think I am getting inspired. And this will have more close relevence to the versions of Envy and Edward me and my close friend play on a MMORPG we play** If I manage to produce said fic, I will be sure to alert you. ^-^;;
I adore this story.
Oooooh, so cute!
I was curious about this pairing, and I really love how you portrayed it. It was beautiful. I especially loved it because Gracia didn't forget about Maes even if she has found Maria, and that Maes is still a very important part of her life. The idea of Maes guiding Maria and Gracia together sounds sweet, too. ^^
Added to memories!
Oh! I wibbled! There was angst and fluff, bundled up into one squishy package! And when Gracia told her mother what-for--?
You'd made the pairing so believable for me. <3
Eeeeee! ♥ ♥!!! I love this so much, dearheart. *_*
Wow, this is the first Ross/Gracia fic I have ever read. (me being a HUGE Roy x Maes fan, this is pretty intriguing.)
This is really good. I am not usually a fan of yuri but this was really great! thanks for sharing it!!!!
Wow, this was really nice. I loved the look you gave us of Gracia's family.
Honestly, I was skeptical of this at first, but you really do pull it off very well. I like it :3 I particularly liked the links you put in there between Maria and Maes and the flashback, those were very good ^^
Oh, lovely! The introduction in the supermarket was fantastic - I love that Maria is so good with kids, and it's so nice to see Gracia having a chance to move on.
::hugs it:: poor Winry
I *love* it! I'm wondering...do you feel like continuing this story? I think it has a good potential to help delve into Winry and Sheska's relationship a little more...
.. It.. .it's a Xellos x Filia fic. ;~; *wibble*
I love you and your pairing choice. <33333 I can't wait to read more fics! *_*
Xelfi! Xelfi! It's Xelfi! *does happy dance*
I absolutely loved it! Xellos is delightfully cryptic and Fillia is wonderfully upset and angry. *loves on you*
Whee~, X/F... haven't read any story with that pairing for months, but you made all the love come back at once. This was wonderful! ^^
I . . . need to ask you to friend me on your fic journal (if I can), because the last time I read a Slayers story by you was when you posted it to fanfiction.net, and I've forgotten how much I missed them! Your Xellos and Filia voices both are in excellent tuning here. I can't help liking Xellos in particular, because he's so entertaining in a sort of terrible way. His dialogue is a blend of really . . . aggravating sentiments and sensible ones--it's like he uses the former to drive Filia to irrationality, and the latter to trump her when she's there. Even if I've misjudged that their dialogue rings exactly like it did in the show, and it's been, well, years since I've read a story that feels so authentic. Thank you for sharing!
Wow, a Xel/Filia fict with no OOC!
I like it :)
@___@ OMG, XELLOS x FILIA FIC @___@
I love you soo much, Miss Zanne.
Your fics totally rocks my world =)
Have I ever told you how much I love your fics and your pairings of choice? If not: LOVELOVELOVE!! ♥♥♥ And with that this grammatically incorrect post will end before my brain explodes in an overdosage of happiness.
*grins happily* And another! I adore X/F fics. *sighs*
Awesome. :love: Almost forgot to mention this, but use of The Second Coming was genius. :)
Very nice! I like how this is a new beginning for both Filia and Val, and it is hilarious how they wound up with the house. :)
Like I said, you needn't trouble yourself over that."
Now that is... actually really sweet, and it's so typical of him to be so obnoxious about letting her know. I like that she picked up on it, too, and that she can't take a present graciously even when it's gift-wrapped, if the ribbon's purple.
I love your writing <3
This fic is really great! =D
*Is still laughing* That's soooooo Xelloss! Now I have to wonder what happened with the poor man to make him sell a perfectly nice house, on the other hand the Outer World is as it is with magic and any trace of it probably scares the hell outta them. (Maybe it's the ghost of Almace and Erulogos! Forever arguing into the night about the strangeness of the Slayers world. Or maybe it's Millie's ghost training her sharpshooting skills in the basement -or better, she's cooking! XD) Whatever it is, it at least gave us this funny little scene.
OH! That was GORGEOUS! A perfect representation of Xelloss and Filia, hehehe. I can't tell you how much this little fic cheered me up. I was trying desperately to find something well-written to read in the fanfic world, and the results up till this had been dismal.
*grins* So very Xelloss, to find a way to do something nice while completely serving himself in the process. And so very Filia to be self-righteous even while she takes advantage of the situation. Ha!